Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
People in the world are suffering from various types of problems that are simply avoidable. A lot of these problems can be traced back to the over usage and addiction to smart phones. I believe that young children should not own smart phones.
The phenomena of addiction to smart phones has a more profound impact on the health of children when compared to adults. These days, you can rarely see a child who is not suffering from a poor eyesight. Encouraging the usage of smart phones in children tends to make them more lazy as they forgo any physical activity by prefering to stay indoors and play all kinds of virtual games. Some of these games are quite harmful to a child psychologically as well and leads to a distorted and false impression on what is supposed to be right and wrong. For example, games that promote violence such as 'Call of Duty' or 'Counter Strike' are not appropriate for children under a particular age. Owning smart phones also leads to reduced social interactions among children which is harmful for the personal development of a child. What is necessary for a young child is to interact with the physical world around him. The child needs to learn how various people differ from each other, how the natural world functions, face hardships and learn how to overcome them, such as, getting hurt while playing or by some accident and so on. It is said that the curiosity of a human being is maximum when he is a child. We should not stifle that curiosity by placing a cage over it, which is what smart phones can be for children. They cage the natural inquisitivness of a child and make them monotonous and prone to be more dependant on others to help them through their life.
It can be argued that smart phones can be beneficial for children as it allows them access to information that the parents might not be able to provide or it allows the child to stay in touch with family when they are away. But all this can be achieved using a regular phone as well which doesn't have access to the internet. Owning a phone is not a major issue, but, in today's world; phones are more than simply devices to contact another person. The plethora of information that is available on the internet which is accessible through phones can be a double edged sword. It can lead to inappropriate information being accessible to a child who doesn't have the maturity to deal with it. Such instances can lead to depression, anxiety and several other psychological conditions which are very harmful.
Equipping a child with a smart phone is like handing a toddler a pair of scissors to cut paper. It is possible that the toddler might be able to cut the paper but the chances of him injuring himself are very high. Hence, I am in compliance with the parents who forbid their children from owning a smart phone.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'dependent' on?
Suggestion: dependent
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ved using a regular phone as well which doesnt have access to the internet. Owning a p...
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Suggestion: doesn't
...rmation being accessible to a child who doesnt have the maturity to deal with it. Such...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, well, while, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 15.1003584229 225% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2325.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 504.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6130952381 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5067298873 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460317460317 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 721.8 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.508674886 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.086956522 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9130434783 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5652173913 5.45110844103 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295715984031 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.095088080688 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698340353613 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182209012678 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.038521651225 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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