Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
There are many ways of children education, different options that parents take to raise their children, so it is important to follow always the same line in order to establish a predictable and safe environment in our homes. Personally, I believe that it is advantageous to enjoying recreational time just playing with our children. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, a parent that teach to their children any sport helps them to develop new social skills, like team work, know how to lose and empathy for others. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. About twenty years ago I was at the park who was near my home with my dad and sister, and we were playing soccer and having fun. But then we realized that other children come close to us and my dad invited them to join us in spite of the fact they could be better players. At the end it was a great lesson that we should always be aware of our strength, that experience helped us to develop a self confidence feeling and moreover, to avoid prejudices. As a result I am a very secure person with a high sense of my capacities.
Secondly, in order to maintain a good communication routine with our children and be aware of what it is going up with their lives, I think that share the same taste for some games encourages that achievement. For instance, a classmate from school used to talk to us the most incredible stories that her parents had said while they were playing Monopoly on the weekends, and as a consequence she always was considered the most interesting girl of school, for her funny ways to tell them. Additionally, she develop impressive acting skills at that time. Moreover, she become an excel actress with a remarkable career with the support of her parents.
Finally, I am of the opinion that spend fun time playing with your children could be crucial for their development into a happy adult. This is because the social lessons that can be accomplished by playing a sport with your children and the intimacy to talk about everything to get close to them make it through a game.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 127, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put before the verb 'follow'.
Suggestion: always follow
...e their children, so it is important to follow always the same line in order to establish a p...
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Line 1, column 275, Rule ID: IT_IS_JJ_TO_VBG[1]
Message: Did you mean 'enjoy'?
Suggestion: enjoy
...y, I believe that it is advantageous to enjoying recreational time just playing with our...
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Line 3, column 669, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ling and moreover, to avoid prejudices. As a result I am a very secure person with...
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Line 5, column 397, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[5]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'was'.
Suggestion: was always
... the weekends, and as a consequence she always was considered the most interesting girl of...
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Line 5, column 507, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'develops'.
Suggestion: develops
...ny ways to tell them. Additionally, she develop impressive acting skills at that time. ...
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Line 5, column 575, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ills at that time. Moreover, she become an excel actress with a remarkable career with t...
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Line 7, column 321, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t close to them make it through a game.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, while, for instance, i feel, i think, as a result, first of all, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1759.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60471204188 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62176270911 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560209424084 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.4363142196 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.266666667 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4666666667 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.26666666667 5.45110844103 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193563432915 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0655852247556 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0614426024784 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122283288837 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336756422104 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.