Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
During last decades teaching methods of schools have evolved. In the early schools, parents had more participating in the learning of children but in modern schools parents only oversee the learning of their children. However, nowadays al ot of parents do not have enough time to spend with their children and they have to schedule their time better to spemd with children. Some parents use that time to do schoolworks with their children and others prefer to have fun and playing games and sports together. In my perpective, I firmly believe that If parents do not have enough time, they have to spend their narrow time to play with cheldren and have fun with them. In the following paragraphes I will explaind that why I hold this view.
Nowadays, students study in modern schools that use school based method to teaching. I the other words, students do not have anything to do at home. So, these schools provide the opportunity to parents to spent their time with their children to have only fun. They can play games and sports instead of doing schoolwork. I witnesed my nine years old nefew that does not have anything to do at home and spend his time only in playing and watching television. Considering that his father works late, when his father comes home they focus to have fun and most of the time they play video games. I have seen that his parents only supervise on his study and they don't spend time to participate in his study. This example clearly illustrates that parents could spend their free time to have fun with their children.
As the second reason. I want to point out something which widely accepted. It's now impossible to neglect the phsychlogical effect of playing of parents with their children. Scientific researches that were conducted in Finland as the country that have best educational system, revealed that, students who play with their parents almost one hour pay day have better efficiency in learning and are more selfconfidence. So they recommended parents should spend their free time to play with their children and schoolwork is in the second stage of priority. Based on the mentioned scientific results, we can conclude that if parents do no a lot of time to spend with their children, they have to focus on playing with them.
In conclusion, even though a lot of think that helping their children in their homeworks will help them to be succesful and they prefer to spend time to do schoolworks, I believe that nawadays its bettet to spent time to play with them becasue of above mentioned reasons.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, second, so, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2105.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79498861048 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50330389144 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.435079726651 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.329817216 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.238095238 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9047619048 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.04761904762 5.45110844103 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.534505501522 0.236089414692 226% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.183629883282 0.076458572812 240% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137472083102 0.0737576698707 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.36041282277 0.150856017488 239% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0946196064297 0.0645574589148 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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