Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to

In general, parents are often busy and they cannot spend time with their children. In on hand, some parents like to spend their time with their kids playing games and practicing some sports, on the other hand, others prefer to spend time doing homework or another activity related to school. However, it is very important to consider dividing the time wisely. In the next lines, I will try to explain some reasons to support this opinion.

Firstly, kids need to enjoy their life according to their age, what I mean is that they should spend their time based on a schedule. After school, they must enjoy their time playing, resting or sharing family time. For example, if we compare a kid with a machine, both need to take a rest in order to reset their mind.

Secondly, when parents finish their daily job, they have to focus on their family. One of the most terrible mistakes that parents sometimes make is taking office work and arrive their homes in order to continue doing. For example, in a family, when father arrives and he spends his time working on an office project, he is losing very valuable time to share with his wife and kids.

Thirdly, in many countries, people, unfortunately, do not have a good salary, and it is very common to find families, where the father has at least two jobs, with the purpose to earn money to maintain his family. For example in my country, Mexico, it is very common this situation, additionally, the mother has to work hard too all day, in order to support the family economy. This situation generates a wide disadvantage because they are not attending their kids and also they are losing valuable time with family together.

In conclusion, parents should invest their time with their kids every day. Moreover, kids will grow up very soon and the time will never come back.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, as to, at least, for example, i mean, in conclusion, in general, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1509.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 320.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.715625 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.275701729 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0733698516 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.6 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 5.45110844103 202% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325789052265 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12038051833 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0936291474003 0.0737576698707 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193203973027 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0974876497675 0.0645574589148 151% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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