The amount of personal time which people get to have with their family is reducing on a day-to-day basis. Especially the work-life balance is a huge miss. One thing which a subset of these workers, who are parents, do not seem to concur is the ways of utilizing the little amount of time they have with their kids. Some people say that they have to spend the time productively - helping kids in the process of learning, assisting them on their homework activities and so on. The others tend to lean towards utilizing the time in parent-child bonding. Turning a blind eye towards those who support or oppose either of these arguments, I prefer parents involving in fun activities with children.
Among a multitude of reasons, I would consider the fact that, children in their formative years of development, need love and support of their parents. Children must not feel isolated. They must be provided with a conducive atmosphere to open up to their parents. The element of trust is built only with parent-child bonding, which in turn, is dependent on children's ability to connect with parents. This is improved by fun activities and hence busy parents should resort to playing with their children in their free time.
On the other hand, parents in the busy world today need some time to escape from reality. They build up enormous amount of stress due to their work and their responsibilities. They need some time to relax, which is made possible through indulging in fun activities with children. Stress busting helps them in keeping themselves mentally healthy on a long run. Hence, busy parents should not be endowed with additional responsibilities of teaching their children. They have to prefer hiring someone who could help their children with education and homework.
Hence, I reiterate that busy parents should lean towards spending their time with kids on games and sports. This leads to healthy a parent-child relationship.
- In some countries, people are no longer allowed to smoke in many public places and office buildings. Do you think this is a good rule or a bad rule? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer. 70
- Advances in transportation and communication like the airplane and the telephone have changed the way nations intercat with each other in a global society. Choose another technological innovation that you think is important. Give specific reasons for your 76
- Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to s 60
- Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to s 60
- Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship. 83
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 199, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
... thing which a subset of these workers, who are parents, do not seem to concur is the w...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, so, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1622.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03726708075 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70472731474 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515527950311 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.1907840919 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.3684210526 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9473684211 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.68421052632 5.45110844103 31% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346844894211 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113578054731 0.076458572812 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0780591617622 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232663197322 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419048911093 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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