Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records.Which approach do you prefer, and why?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this day and age of modernization, plenty of people use social media and allocate a substantial portion of their time to that. In this regard, an overwhelming majority of people believe they should not create records of their life on social media; meanwhile, others hold the opposite viewpoint. I, personally, utterly agree with the latter group for two main reasons, on which I will elaborate in the following essay.
To begin with, by uploading pictures and information to social media, people can achieve their objective in life.
To be more specific, social media set the stage for people to be connected with no limitation. In this vein, people can write comments under others' posts and express their feeling, which can inculcate the sense of confidence in the owner of the post. This feature is extremely advantageous when people feel tired in their way of success and are required a motivation to fuel their ambition. In this line of thought, imagine a student named Jim who studied for the TOEFL test and shared his efforts by posting them on Instagram. Someday, Jim became disappointed of getting a brilliant mark, sorrowing, he opened Instagram and embarked on reading comments below his posts. Most of them were regarding how he speaks so native-like and a bunch of people want to be as fluent as him. This incident made him feel exhilarated and built up his confidence again aiding him to get back on track, and eventually, Jim achieves 111 out of 120 which is an excellent score. Had he not shared his experiences on Instagram, he would not have been able to pass the TOEFL test.
Another noteworthy point is that sharing experiences on social media would aid readers to a great extent in their life. Vividly, individuals have a limited time, so they need the precious treasury of others' experiences. Therefore, sharing what is happening to them, people can change others' life because they do not have an obligation to squander their invaluable time on gaining the same experiences. In this regard, social media provide people with a golden opportunity of connection, which can be exerted for sharing. For example, I can recall my first year as a student in Toronto, where I had not ever been to. Therefore, everything was new to me made me scared since I am a totally introverted person and cannot ask others frequently. One day, I found one of the senior students’ Facebook page, who shared all of his experiences about his first days as students in Toronto. That page was a life-saver on the account for it assisted me to do not waste my time and reduce my stress in the process of adapting to a new city.
In conclusion, sharing experiences on social media is a helpful act. This is because not only can the owner of experiences be benefited from that, but also readers would utilize that them to do not squander their time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, regarding, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, to begin with, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2363.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 492.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80284552846 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71133259544 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530487804878 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 746.1 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.2733118911 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 107.409090909 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3636363636 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22727272727 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199118929361 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0632067473821 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539571120749 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1353951872 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0440011830986 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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