A controversy is often raised about the quality of education students receive inside and outside of school. Some groups of people hold the view that the quality of education learned outside the school are valuable. Others have an opposing view and feel that the best education is the one which students receive inside school. In my vantage point, I concur with the later view and feel education learned inside school is superior and can provide a better opportunity for students to be admitted to universities.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that learning at school is supervised by professional teachers.In fact, If students learn at home without being supervised, many of the information that they learn might not be accurate. However, having this education at schools by professional teacher can be more rewarding A vivid example can be given to shed light on what was elaborated above is the information students learn by tutors who are tutoring online. Many of these tutors do not have the experience to provide guidance to students. Thus, such learning tool night not be sufficient to qualify children to succeed in their exams.
The second reason which deserves some words is that school learning is known for its outcome. In other words schools can give exactly how many students are going to be accepted to study at the university, which creates a clear path for children's destiny. Without having such a kind of statistics, parent can hardly realize where their children are going after school graduation
Although the aforementioned reasons are the first to cross my mind at a glance, they are by no means the only reasons available. In fact, there is another subtle reason available. The noteworthy, refreshing, intelligible study that was published in the Education Academy Journal which concluded that working under the supervision of teachers, increase the chance of student being accepted at universities. The study was conducted on 120 students from different schools to avoid bias
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To wrap up, contemplating the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that educating children at schools with the supervision of teachers does not only enhances children's knowledge, but also provide a strong foundation of academia that helps students to thrive in the future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, thus, in fact, kind of, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1937.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 370.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23513513514 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81742726821 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518918918919 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.9307073972 48.9658058833 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.133333333 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6666666667 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155315563293 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0686032739983 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0541557080556 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0924826665058 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0520877663369 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21 Out of 30
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