At some universities, students take part in making decisions about the issues that affect daily life of everyone on campus such as how many hours the libraries should be open each day or what kinds of food should be served in the cafeteria. But at some universities, experts are hired to make these decisions, and students are almost never involved. Which approach do you prefer and why?
In the modern era, a university has played a prominent role in all societies. Because it is of paramount importance, academicians have always sought ways to enhance the university condition. So, some people may hold the view that students participate in making intention about crucial issues that influence daily life. However, some others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that university must invite professional people who have experience on controversial issues for making decisions, and students do not participate in them. I content that the university ought to choose experts people for this purpose. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first important factor to be mentioned is that specialists have been studied lesson many years for making effective decision for crucial issues. To elaborate on my point, since experts consume many years for studying a major, they would able to make the best decision about hard issues. They have the ability to deep analysis and evaluate problems in many ways, and considering all aspect of problems. In these situations, the specialist would make an influential and efficient determination. However, students do not have adequate time for analysis and evaluate all effective factor that influences an important dilemma. So, they may make a superficial decision that may not effective. Consider open libraries for instance. when experts want to decide for opening hours of libraries, they consider all aspect of this issue such as consuming energy, during the time of examine, and many other factors that influence it. Then, they will make an effective decision which student can use libraries in the best ways. But, if students want to decide about this dilemma, they may consider only one factor during a time of exams. Hence, they would not make a practical decision.
Another reason which deserves some word here is that experts can make the easier and faster decision than students. To shed more light on this matter, an expert group consisting of 5 or 4 people that profession in their occupation so that they can make a fast decision. If one of them has disagrees opinion, other members can readily convenience her or his to change her or his mind. Conversely, students group have a lot of members that have a different idea about issues. In other words, it is hard for them to decide crucial issues, because they may consider own idea not all ideas. For example, when students want to decide about the food of cafeteria, they would consider their idea and taste about food. Furthermore, students committee do not have experts about food ingredients, and how they affect students brain and body. Thy only consider their taste and idea. Indeed, they cannot make a suitable and adequate decision.
All in all, considering the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that the university should choose some committees that have expert people for making decision about making decision for university. I believe that experts not only studying a lot for making an affluential decision but also making a fast decision about issues.
- TPO 42 70
- TOEFL TPO 40 - Integrated Writing Task 83
- TPO 41 78
- TOEFL TPO 47 - Integrated Writing Task 80
- Students in high school should learn by sitting there listening to the teacher while taking notes or communicating and sharing ideas with class Which one do you prefer Use specific reasons and detailed examples to support your answer 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 730, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: When
.... Consider open libraries for instance. when experts want to decide for opening hour...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, then, for example, for instance, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2671.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 511.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22700587084 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70215360561 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454011741683 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 838.8 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2149486523 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3928571429 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.25 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189099508478 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562059016067 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0505114038889 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12699859078 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0158310507289 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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