Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other
young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations
do you think is better?
The role of a parent is to show the world to the children and to ready them for it. Then the time
comes when these young adults start to disembark on their own journeys. Some do it earlier,
some a bit later. I prefer the situation when one wants her independence as soon as possible.
Firstly, there is never going to be the perfect time. There is always going to be something why
one should stay with their parents - financials, relationships, someone to lean on. However, the
world is a hard place where survives the one who has all of the necessary skills. And some of
the skills are acquired with parents and some of them can only be found by themselves.
Secondly, many teenagers don’t have a very good relationship with their parents. Such
independence from them actually brings better understanding of each other and brings harmony
into the relationship. Thus parents can really become one’s friends and actually be heard when
the young adult is in time of need.
Thirdly, even after many years parents also need their own space. Of course they are parents,
but they are also people. People who want to spend time with just each other, who maybe want
to try something new, who want to go on a holiday and not worry about what is going on at
home. Because they believe in their children and in their journeys.
To sum up, I believe that young adults need their independence as soon as possible in order to
acquire all of the necessary world skills, to find the harmonious relationship with their parents
and for the parents themselves to have their own time with just each other.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 54, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...rd place where survives the one who has all of the necessary skills. And some of the skil...
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Line 6, column 87, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ho has all of the necessary skills. And some of the skills are acquired with parents and so...
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Line 13, column 19, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'peopled'.
Suggestion: peopled
...se they are parents, but they are also people. People who want to spend time with jus...
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Line 17, column 9, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...s soon as possible in order to acquire all of the necessary world skills, to find the har...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, however, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, thus, of course, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1338.0 1977.66487455 68% => OK
No of words: 283.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72791519435 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48160261072 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537102473498 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 395.1 618.680645161 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.9750738188 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.625 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6875 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0625 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 18.0 4.53405017921 397% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.404510048727 0.236089414692 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116618114146 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0898363687026 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127787336196 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.09106031201 0.0645574589148 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.77 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 86.8835125448 47% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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