Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Parents always play an important role in their children's lives. Therefore, some young adults would rather live with their families for a longer time. On the other hand, some people want to be independent of their parents. Personally, I am of the latter opinion. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, it will be much easier for a young adult to be successful in life if he learns to be independent at a young age. When a child decides not to rely so much on his parents, it means that he wants to take control of his own life and he knows what he wants his life to be exactly. Therefore, he is more persistent to pursue his dreams and more prone to success. My brother's experience is a good example to illustrate this. When he was eighteen, he wanted to be more independent of our parents since he didn't want to be their hard burden. He went studying abroad in order to realize his dream as a programmer. Without his parents by his side, he learned to make important decisions on his own and although some of them weren't great, he gained a lot of experience and he knew how to successfully overcome difficulties. As a result, with some ups and downs, he managed to make his dream come true when he was offered a well-paid job at Google. Hadn't it been for all of the hardness of being on himself, he wouldn't have learned so much and been successful.
Furthermore, parents are not always there for us to rely on so we need to get used to being on our owns. Parents already have many things to worry about every day such as their jobs, the numerous bills they have to pay including their children's tuition, so it is better for children to be independent of their parents and make their lives less stressful. Moreover, many parents are required to work abroad or to go on working trips on a daily basis. Consequently, parents are not always available for children to count on. For example, my parents have to travel a lot due to their jobs' description. Since I was a kid, I have had no choice but to be more independent and self-reliant. I was taught to make meals, do laundry, do my homework all by myself. Although sometimes I feel very depressed because of living alone but day by day, I became more and more mature and it didn't take me so much time to familiarize myself with the life in college.
In conclusion, I truly believe that young adults ought to be independent of their parents. This is because the independence of parents will help children to be more mature, easier to be successful and children do not always have their parents by their sides to count on. Children ought to learn the one that is responsible for their own lives, not their parents.
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- What is your approach to problem-solving, and how does it work for you? Use specific details to support your response. 70
- Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinio 73
- Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinio 70
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'for example', 'i feel', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'as a result', 'to begin with', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.168784029038 0.229887763892 73% => OK
Verbs: 0.179673321234 0.158761421928 113% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0889292196007 0.0866891130778 103% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0635208711434 0.046263068375 137% => OK
Pronouns: 0.117967332123 0.0685040099705 172% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.114337568058 0.118717715034 96% => OK
Participles: 0.0254083484574 0.0351676179071 72% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.59162574459 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0635208711434 0.0309702414327 205% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0580762250454 0.0887237588012 65% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.010889292196 0.0209618222197 52% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0127041742287 0.0139019557991 91% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2760.0 2387.08602151 116% => OK
No of words: 500.0 408.028673835 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52 5.86048508987 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.48200974243 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.274 0.338922669872 81% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.202 0.251872472559 80% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.138 0.174417080927 79% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.082 0.112833075102 73% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59162574459 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.462 0.524397521467 88% => OK
Word variations: 53.0619892367 59.2087087015 90% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6684587814 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.5533526081 97% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7476265455 48.84282405 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.4 120.699889404 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.5533526081 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.6 0.644075263715 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.54480286738 180% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 40.2 45.7405998639 88% => OK
Elegance: 0.854271356784 1.45489161554 59% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344032655203 0.300154397459 115% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.122985756686 0.103427244359 119% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0720640816836 0.0752933317313 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.499192738084 0.497263757937 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.142307312148 0.151897553556 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129630141174 0.114077575197 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0750285643804 0.0781384742642 96% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.38766472194 0.336927656856 115% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.150392128818 0.067059652881 224% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.262215874408 0.210909579961 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0443046746845 0.0618886996521 72% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.91756272401 183% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.75985663082 217% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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