I agreed that young people enjoy life more than older people do. The life becomes so different in all ways, i think it becomes so easer for the young people than for their parents,many things become easier to get than before. The following discussion reveals my view.
First of all, the advancing of technology is faster now days, and the younger people enjoy any such advancing like some company releases a new phone or computer and a lot of young people are hurrying to get a new staff, but same thing is not enjoyable for the older people and a lot of them have a simple phone which can do it 's job.
Second, there are a lot of places which fits for younger and not really good for older like a disco , a lot of younger go there for dancing they are enjoying when hear a loud songs but this is so noisy for the older people who search for quite place a way from noises.
Last but not least, a lot of young people are enjoying when playing a video game but this is not enjoyable. For example my son is waiting the weekend to play a video game , he becomes so happy when playing, talking a lot about this game but i feel this is not enjoyable to me it's away from my thinking i 'm enjoying when i read a newspaper a lot.
To put everything in nut shell, young people have different way of thinking, attitude , accounting of future from older, so may they are enjoying with staff that are not the same thing for older, and some times the opposite thing, and in my view the younger people are enjoying the life more because they don't have that much responsibility like their parents. Furthermore they have a little thinking compare to the older.
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now days,
nowadays,
which can do it 's job.
which can do its job.
a lot of places which fits for younger
a lot of places which fit for younger
young people have different way of thinking
young people have different ways of thinking
they have a little thinking compare to the older.
they have a little thinking compared to the older.
Sentence: The life becomes so different in all ways, i think it becomes so easer for the young people than for their parents,many things become easier to get than before.
Error: easer Suggestion: ease
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Different Words: 141 200
You told in the conclusion:
because they don't have that much responsibility like their parents.
but you didn't talk about responsibility in the essay body.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 17 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
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No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 310 350
No. of Characters: 1305 1500
No. of Different Words: 141 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.196 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.21 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.18 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 72 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 48 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 28 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 15 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34.444 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 22.247 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.454 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.756 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.224 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5