Independence is a right of every adult around the world. In fact, young adults are pre-adults. Therefore, independence is a right for them, too. In my humble opinion, young adults should get their independence as soon as they can live alone. Here are my reasons why.
First of all, living independently is required as a preparation for adulthood. Thus, young adults can learn how to live alone in life. If a young-adult doesn’t make any mistakes in life, because their parents already took care of the situation, then how do we expect them to make a good decision in the future when they are alone. For example, we can see this concept in nature as well, birds are pushing their children from their nest to teach them how to fly. Hence, young adults have to experience a challenging situation to take the correct action accordingly. I also want to give an example from my life. I was always independent even when I was 10 years old. I could take the bus, visit my grandparents after school. This taught me a lot, right now I know how to not get lost in a city. On the other hand, my parents don’t allow my brother to travel alone, and he is 17 now. If we compare our social skills, I have better communication skills with strangers than my brother has, which shows independence of myself when I was a child brought me lots of social skills. Consequently, I believe, young adults should learn how to live independently from their parents.
Another good point for living alone is that it is less stressful. I am a person who has his own social life, and my friends ask me to go out at night. However, when I am in my parents house they question me a lot. I feel the responsibility to give a report to them, who I will meet, where we will eat and so on. Although parents allow their children to go out at night, they would still call them just to ask how they are doing. Let me give an example with my parents in another situation. When my school started I needed to move to another city. There I realized that my mother calls me a few times a day. After a couple of weeks she has called less frequently. Now I am calling her to ask how she is doing. Sweet, right? I think living independently would make us appreciate our family more because we are far from the family stress.
Overall, I strongly believe that young adults have to live independently, because of two reasons. First, they can experience life by themselves, and second, they will be less stressful and will appreciate their family more.
- People learn things better from those at their own level such as fellow students or co workers than from those at a higher level such as teachers or supervisors 70
- TPO 18. Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Agree/ disagree? 83
- TPO 22 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Teachers should not make their social or political views known to students in the classroom.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
- In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today
- TPO16 (integrated) 90
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 666, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...dependent even when I was 10 years old. I could take the bus, visit my grandparen...
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Line 5, column 491, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e with my parents in another situation. When my school started I needed to move to a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, consequently, first, hence, however, if, second, so, still, then, therefore, thus, well, for example, i feel, i think, in fact, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2057.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 458.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49126637555 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63076880208 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508733624454 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.1922221728 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.5666666667 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2666666667 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.93333333333 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.88709677419 307% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270725636862 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0726739889105 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0674951035888 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183321549745 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.075447008327 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 11.7677419355 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.17 10.9000537634 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.52 8.01818996416 81% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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