TOEFL essay: Some students prefer to study alone. Others prefer to study with a group of student. Which do you prefer ? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Essay topics
Submitted by joyce05 on Sat, 08/04/2018 - 07:22

Although many people tell me to develop a habit of studying alone, it is better for me to study with people. Studying with people make a good mood. Mood is very important. The surrounding environment affects studying. Such as quiet, it's easy to start studying

To begin with, studying with people is very quiet. so I can concentrate well. When I study alone, I can do anything then I can’t concentrate. For example, When I study in my room, I hear the television and talking in the next room. I can’t concentrate. Sometimes my friend came my home to study with me, at that time my home is very quiet. Then I can study.

Next, I feel like studying because of the person studying next to me. Let me tell you my story. When I study alone in my room. Nobody else look for me, and I don’t want to study. Therefore I do something other than studying. In other words sometimes I didn’t study and I played. I need motivation to study.

For these reasons, I have to study with people. Studying time at school or in the library is the best study time for me.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 67, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...me to develop a habit of studying alone, it is better for me to study with people...
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Line 1, column 119, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...er for me to study with people. Studying with people make a good mood. Mood is v...
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Line 1, column 132, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...study with people. Studying with people make a good mood. Mood is very important...
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Line 3, column 52, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...th, studying with people is very quiet. so I can concentrate well. When I study al...
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Line 3, column 187, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... For example, When I study in my room, I hear the television and talking in the n...
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Line 5, column 97, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...g next to me. Let me tell you my story. When I study alone in my room. Nobody else l...
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Line 5, column 140, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[4]
Message: The pronoun 'Nobody' must be used with a third-person verb: 'looks'.
Suggestion: looks
...n I study alone in my room. Nobody else look for me, and I don't want to study....
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Line 5, column 185, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...for me, and I don't want to study. Therefore I do something other than studying. In ...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
look, so, then, therefore, well, for example, i feel, such as, in other words, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 52.1666666667 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 883.0 1977.66487455 45% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 197.0 407.700716846 48% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.48223350254 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74642080493 4.48103885553 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60192766443 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 212.727598566 47% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507614213198 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 277.2 618.680645161 45% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 9.0 20.1344086022 45% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.7044471952 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 44.15 100.406767564 44% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 9.85 20.6045352989 48% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188815381375 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.062425893254 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521329336579 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135242625033 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0127812856567 0.0645574589148 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 4.6 11.7677419355 39% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.26 58.1214874552 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.4 10.1575268817 43% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.22 10.9000537634 66% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.17 8.01818996416 77% => OK
difficult_words: 26.0 86.8835125448 30% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.0 10.002688172 40% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 5.6 10.0537634409 56% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 4.0 10.247311828 39% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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