TOEFL essay When people succeed it is because of hard work Luck has nothing to do with success Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above Use specific and examples to explain your position

Nobody in this world is born with success, it is achieved by continuous hard work. I personally believe that luck has nothing to do with success. There is one famous saying" Hard work pays off", it is true in every fields. If we set a goal and work hard to achieve it, surely we can succeed. My arguments for this point are explored below.

First, all the successful people in this world are hard workers. If we look around we can see their inspirational stories. Mahatma Gandhi, who is the freedom fighter of India worked hard to freed his country. If he believed in good luck, nobody in India ...

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Nobody in this world is born with success, it is achieved by continuous hard work.
Nobody in this world is born with success. It is achieved by continuous hard work.

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