There is no shortage of opinion on whether school's fundings should be channeled more to academic facilities or sports and social events. Even though some scholars argue that classes and libraries should be the main focus when it comes to dividing financial support at universities and colleges, I am of the opinion that academic and non-academic facilities are of the same importance and thus should be taken care of equally.
First of all, it is safe to say that for many college students, attending post-secondary schools doesn't solely mean concentrating on studying and doing research. Activities that are expected to experience during the 4 years of undergraduate schools vary from education to recreation. By giving financial assistance to both entities, schools are providing students a favorable environment where they can develop scholarly, socially and physically. I have to admit that my opinion is influenced by the experience I had at my university. My school would pay as much attention to sports and student activities as they do for classes and libraries. The school header believes students should be encouraged to take part in other activities besides their studies so they can grow to be more well-rounded. As a result, my schoolmates and I always speak highly of our college as we are proud that we were oriented to study hard and play hard as well, unlike students from other schools who only had their eyes on their academic performance.
Another reason why sports and social department should be funded equally as their academic counterparts is because not all undergraduates are studying to become scholars and specialists. In fact, there are always a considerable number of students majoring in athletics and social studies at any universities, who expect to be equally supported as students from other departments. It is obviously not fair if school money is mostly invested to upgrading class facilities and libraries while stadiums and event halls are also in the need of renovating or expanding. If this is the case, sports and social students may feel discouraged and consequently, lose their spirits to keep striving and practice hard for their future careers. This can also lead to the lack of athletes or social workers in the future who are just as important as other scholars.
In conclusion, while I'm in favor of the idea that academic facilities should be amply funded to serve their educational purpose, I also believe sports and students activities should be considered equally significant so both sides would be supported with the same money and effort. This way, all students will be encouraged to develop in more aspects and non-academic students won't be disheartened at the lack of financial support from the school.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 211, Rule ID: MAIN_FOCUS[1]
Message: Use simply 'focus'.
Suggestion: focus
...hat classes and libraries should be the main focus when it comes to dividing financial sup...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 98, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...dents, attending post-secondary schools doesnt solely mean concentrating on studying a...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 66, Rule ID: EQUALLY_AS[1]
Message: Don't say 'equally as'. You can use either 'equally' or 'as' on its own. When comparing two nouns, use 'just as'.
Suggestion: equally; as; just as
... and social department should be funded equally as their academic counterparts is because ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 22, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...other scholars. In conclusion, while Im in favor of the idea that academic faci...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, consequently, first, if, may, second, so, thus, well, while, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2319.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16481069042 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95453249358 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496659242762 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 723.6 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.9107229965 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.9375 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0625 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8125 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186226731667 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.068525903828 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0384626060175 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128064828841 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0280300050371 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 211, Rule ID: MAIN_FOCUS[1]
Message: Use simply 'focus'.
Suggestion: focus
...hat classes and libraries should be the main focus when it comes to dividing financial sup...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 98, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...dents, attending post-secondary schools doesnt solely mean concentrating on studying a...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 66, Rule ID: EQUALLY_AS[1]
Message: Don't say 'equally as'. You can use either 'equally' or 'as' on its own. When comparing two nouns, use 'just as'.
Suggestion: equally; as; just as
... and social department should be funded equally as their academic counterparts is because ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 22, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...other scholars. In conclusion, while Im in favor of the idea that academic faci...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, consequently, first, if, may, second, so, thus, well, while, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2319.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16481069042 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95453249358 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496659242762 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 723.6 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.9107229965 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.9375 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0625 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8125 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186226731667 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.068525903828 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0384626060175 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128064828841 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0280300050371 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.