University and colleges should pay attention more to sports and social activities without any differences financial supports between these and other classes and libraries. In my opinion, sports classes and social activities are more important than lessons classes for future personal life of each student, but it has some advantages and disadvantages too.
First, when each educational places have own sport center, its encourage students to take care of their health and do sports on their free time as a hobby. For example, when I was 16 my parents decided to change our house and I have to changed my collage, therefore, I went to new collage center and I met new people and the best thing of that place was, a gym and swimming pool. All the weekend and my free times I had been there to learn to dive. After my graduated I was won 4 medals of competitions and I’m really happy about it. But some students take all their time in gym so they couldn’t pass their exam because they didn’t study.
Second, in educational places we faced on lots of types of people some of them shy and silent and some of them naughty and noisy. That first group always follows the second group because second group is always a good leader of society activity. In some parts is a great side of social activity that makes them come out of shy behavior but the problem is most of these activities goes on Turbulent time and maybe makes a huge fought and sometimes the police intervene and arrest them and take them to the detention center, which is more harmful than useful. For example, 5 years ago, I was invited my friend to social group about against of valiance to children. One day, they called for a demonstration on Saturday in front of the regional welfare office, when all the people came suddenly the situation messed up, and police arrested us and manager of our college help us to got free.
In conclusion, all cultural and social measures must not do extremely, first of all, students should think about their lessons and then if they have free time, they'll take some sports or do another activity.
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- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
- TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when the 76
- If you could change one important thing about your country what would you change Use reasons and specific examples to support your answers 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 441, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to dive'.
Suggestion: to dive
...my free times I had been there to learn diving. After my graduated I was won 4 medals ...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 161, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they'll
...essons and then if they have free time, theyll take some sports or do another activity...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 209, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ake some sports or do another activity.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, really, second, so, then, therefore, for example, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1747.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 370.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72162162162 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47146017826 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551351351351 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.4183623318 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.384615385 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4615384615 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.69230769231 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120937828537 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0466328225039 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598338144966 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0955121020431 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0749035226174 0.0645574589148 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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