Sports and extracurricular activities are important for students nowadays. Some agree with this statement that universities and colleges should consider sports and social activities as important as the exact,serious subject but on the other hand some other people will think that they should pay more attention to subjects instead of sports and social activities. I strongly agree with these people who do not want to wast time on sports and social activities. I have few reasons to support my idea.
First, the subjects that are more serious draw more attention from the student. In contrary subjects that are less serious like dance draw the attention to waste the time. Of course, in western countries dance is as important as routine classes. The students need to wake up early morning and exercise a lot to become a sucessful dancer and achieve scholarships. For example, my cousin was studying in high school here and decided to be a dancer but at the end she quited because she found it so difficult. in summary as immigrants it is better for all of us to study more serious subject instead of being in dance major and quit unsuccessfully.
Moreover, libraries in the university and college should be allogated to reference books. The reference library of the city what is the reason that everybody wants to be there to study. Because whenever you decide you can borrow the book that you are looking for it.
In summary, we as ,new immigrants.know how to study and we think that it is waste of time and money to be used in sports rather than libraries. But who knows maybe our children will think different from us. we have to be be open to everyone's idea in future.
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Essay evaluation report
The reference library of the city what is the reason that everybody wants to be there to study.
The reference library of the city is the reason that everybody wants to be there to study.
Because whenever you decide you can borrow the book that you are looking for it.
Description: can you re-write this sentence?
it is waste of time
it is a waste of time
Sentence: But who knows maybe our children will think different from us. we have to be be open to everyone's idea in future.
Description: The fragment be be contains a repeated word
Suggestion: Delete a possible duplicate word:
Sentence: The students need to wake up early morning and exercise a lot to become a sucessful dancer and achieve scholarships.
Error: sucessful Suggestion: successful
Sentence: For example, my cousin was studying in high school here and decided to be a dancer but at the end she quited because she found it so difficult. in summary as immigrants it is better for all of us to study more serious subject instead of being in dance major and quit unsuccessfully.
Error: quited Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Moreover, libraries in the university and college should be allogated to reference books.
Error: allogated Suggestion: allocated
flaws:
1.No. of Different Words: 157 200
2.Try to put one more paragraph.
3. Need to talk examples happening in colleges, not for your relatives or yourselves
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 291 350
No. of Characters: 1359 1500
No. of Different Words: 157 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.13 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.67 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.598 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 95 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 69 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.786 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.818 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.312 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.56 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.154 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 208, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , serious
...ial activities as important as the exact,serious subject but on the other hand some othe...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 508, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...ited because she found it so difficult. in summary as immigrants it is better for ...
^^
Line 7, column 18, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...are looking for it. In summary, we as ,new immigrants.know how to study and we ...
^^
Line 7, column 219, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: be
...ill think different from us. we have to be be open to everyones idea in future.
^^^^^
Line 7, column 248, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...we have to be be open to everyones idea in future.
^^^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'for example', 'in summary', 'of course', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.210191082803 0.229887763892 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.168789808917 0.158761421928 106% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0987261146497 0.0866891130778 114% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0573248407643 0.046263068375 124% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0636942675159 0.0685040099705 93% => OK
Prepositions: 0.12101910828 0.118717715034 102% => OK
Participles: 0.015923566879 0.0351676179071 45% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.71177684377 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0477707006369 0.0309702414327 154% => OK
Particles: 0.0031847133758 0.00188951952338 169% => OK
Determiners: 0.0668789808917 0.0887237588012 75% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0191082802548 0.0209618222197 91% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0222929936306 0.0139019557991 160% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1679.0 2387.08602151 70% => OK
No of words: 290.0 408.028673835 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.78965517241 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.48200974243 92% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.337931034483 0.338922669872 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.244827586207 0.251872472559 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.168965517241 0.174417080927 97% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.110344827586 0.112833075102 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71177684377 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541379310345 0.524397521467 103% => OK
Word variations: 55.1751010312 59.2087087015 93% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6684587814 77% => OK
Sentence length: 18.125 20.5533526081 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.3637391747 48.84282405 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.9375 120.699889404 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.125 20.5533526081 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.6875 0.644075263715 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 42.6077586207 45.7405998639 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.1978021978 1.45489161554 82% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30562680837 0.300154397459 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.120239298627 0.103427244359 116% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.127492205969 0.0752933317313 169% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.510632590634 0.497263757937 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.165790980497 0.151897553556 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117224702292 0.114077575197 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0952490401082 0.0781384742642 122% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.289237818722 0.336927656856 86% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.056501372598 0.067059652881 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209625683902 0.210909579961 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118783004068 0.0618886996521 192% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8870967742 42% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 8.42114695341 59% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 13.6433691756 81% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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