When it comes to the arrangement of the university budget, the university should allocate the same amount of money to the extracurricular activities as they do for academics. Some people disagree with my opinion because they think that the primary goal for the university is to focus on academics subjects only. But one day they will find out that my notion is true. As far as I am concerned, I completely agree that the university should finance the sports and social activities as they do for academics for the reasons that I will mention them below.
First is that sports are very important for the student's health as it promote their well-being. As a matter of fact, sports keep the students away from many diseases such as Diabetes, heart problems, and obesity. Participating in sports will increase the flow of blood to various organs in the body. According to the most recent research conducted by Harvard university shown that 90 percent of students who are taking part in sports are less likely to develop diabetes than those who are not participating in those activities. so, the university need a tremendous a mount of money to fund those activities either by establishing a Gym in the university or renting somewhere else to help the students to grow healthy. As you can see, the sports are an integral part in students life.
Second reason that comes in my mind is that social activities are crucial for the students social life in the future since that will help them to learn a lot of valuable things in their life that will contribute significantly to their development and success. It is not surprising that the students who are participating in those activities excel in their academics. As an English proverb goes,'a healthy mind lives in a healthy body'. By participating in activities, the students are able to apply the same principles that they gained from those activities to their studies. It is scientifically proven that students who are enrolled in social activities maintain a high GPA and score higher in their finals. Not to mention that students can learn to be sociable, co-operative, independent from those activities. This illustrates the signifigance of social activities in students life.
Admittedly, it is important for the university to fund libraries too since it is imperative to keep the student up-to-date with the latest technology. It is costly to buy and maintain computers and keep the building running during the day. Otherwise, they will deprive the students fro a tremendous a mount of information that will broaden their minds. But the benefits of funding sports is really important and we have to put it into consideration.
In a conclusion, the university should fund the sports and social activities as they fund the libraries because not only it is important for the students health, but also it is important for their social life in the future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, so, well, such as, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2429.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 487.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98767967146 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90528510465 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.431211498973 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 763.2 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0342280284 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.409090909 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1363636364 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.45454545455 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168932686592 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0561892667848 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472351056516 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114917192314 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430898188065 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21 Out of 30
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