When asked about whether it is more important to keep old friends than it is to make new friends, the overwhelming majority would support that the friendship with old friends would be more stable than that of new friends. However, others take the opposite attitude and assume that new friends could lead to new information and refreshment. In my opinion, keeping old friends are of the same importance to making the new ones. The reasons are as follows.
First of all, old friends are more understanding as the consequence of knowing you much longer. When we encounter some obstacles, it is the old friend that we first come up with and want to confide to. They always remind us not to forget our initial goal as well as help us find ourselves again when we are lost. For example, I got addicted to playing computer games and made a lot of new friends on the internet when I was a freshman, which result in a C on my transcript. I cried in front of my best friend since elementary school. She said that I belong to the type of people that easily lost themselves when they entered a new environment. She asked me to cheer up and always keep my goals in mind. Her words encouraged me to move on. Old friends could give us more useful suggestions because they know us better.
Moreover, new friends may come in handy when there are some emergencies. People is prone to make new friends when they are in a new environment because the distance keep their old friends away. When emergency happens, it is impossible for old friends to come and help you in such a short time. Our new friends are whom we can count on under that circumstance. After my cousin got hit by a car, his friends in his new company offers a lot of help. Without their help, I doubt that he would have recovered as well as he did. New friends would give us a hand when it is necessary.
Last but not least, old friends could remind us the good memory we had before while new friends could bring us access to the new information. In high school reunion, people always recall the most impressive memory that they had back at that time. New friends could bring us to a new restaurant where we haven’t been before. We cannot always live in the past, thus we need new friends. However, old friends who can recall the good memory with you is essential, too.
To sum up, both old friends and new friends are important to us. We should develop all kinds of friendships to assure that we can get help whenever we are in trouble.
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Essay evaluation report
In my opinion, keeping old friends are of the same importance
In my opinion, keeping old friends is of the same importance
it is the old friend that we first come up with
it is the old friend whom we first come up with
I cried in front of my best friend since elementary school.
Description: can you re-write this sentence?
I belong to the type of people that easily lost themselves
I belong to the type of people who easily lost themselves
People is prone to make new friends
People are prone to make new friends
because the distance keep their old friends away
because the distance keeps their old friends away
a lot of help.
a lot of helps.
old friends could remind us the good memory we had before while new friends could bring us access to the new information.
old friends could remind us the good memory we had before, while new friends could bring us access to the new information.
old friends who can recall the good memory with you is essential, too.
old friends ... are essential, too.
flaws:
Don't try to support or against both sides. This is a big mistake in TOEFL exam. Always support or against one side but compare both sides.
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2 //Double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
No. of Words: 460 while No. of Different Words: 217 //it means it has a lot of duplicated content.
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'Automated_readability_index is low' mainly because there are a lot of pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence. Try not use personal experience as examples. follow this user:
http://www.testbig.com/users/ftn
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted. //means you will need to know more vocabulary words. Maybe do some reading on newspaper, blogs, magazines...
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 19 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 460 350
No. of Characters: 1978 1500
No. of Different Words: 217 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.631 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.3 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.35 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 122 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 40 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.037 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.037 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.444 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.491 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.229 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, may, moreover, so, thus, well, while, for example, as well as, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2046.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.45751633987 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46530888019 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474945533769 0.524837075471 90% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.0055393344 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.7777777778 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.51851851852 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 25.0 11.8709677419 211% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262684920148 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0882414471385 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0752235277979 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178842607687 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0791167478606 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 11.7677419355 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 58.1214874552 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.29 10.9000537634 76% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.92 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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