TPO-03 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by Tree34 on Mon, 07/10/2017 - 07:12

My personal experience showed me that both keeping old friends and making new ones is important: it depends on the different needs of life.
When I left my country to move in France for studying I tried to keep in contact with all my Italian friends in order to feel less far from home and to keep in mind where I am from, especially in some moments of loneliness. After several months nearly all the persons I considered as friends keep less and less in contact with me, making me understand that we were experiencing different stages of our life and therefore it was difficult to keep the same relationship we had before because everyone was growing in a different way.
In the meanwhile I found new friends at university and I started to discover new kinds of relationships, sometimes very different from the ones I was habituate to. For example at the beginning I found very strange the fact that French young people use to see each others in the cafe and spend their time and their money there smoking, chatting and drinking. With my Italian friends we use to see each other outside, near the seaside for a volleyball match indeed or at someones`s home in the evening to make a pizza party together, without spending too much money.
These different habits make me think about how different could be one culture compare to another and how difficult would have been for me to keep the same relationship with both types of friends.
On one side I preferred the way I behaved with my old friends and I missed them, but on the other side, I realized the necessity of seeking for new friends, so I tried to agree to their habits and I experienced something else.
Today I can say that this kind of experience has been very useful for me. Last summer, coming back home for holidays I organized a party to my house nearby the mountains and I invited both French new friends and my Italians old ones. The result was that with the new ones I experienced something they have never done before, and this strengthened our friendship, whereas with the old ones I felt home like every time, as I had never left, as our friendship had never been changed.
To conclude, I think both old and new friends are very important, because trough them we can learn about our self and our changes in anytime; sometimes they are the mirror of what we were and what we become.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 511, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a different way" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...had before because everyone was growing in a different way. In the meanwhile I found new friends ...
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Line 3, column 151, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'habituated'.
Suggestion: habituated
...imes very different from the ones I was habituate to. For example at the beginning I foun...
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Line 3, column 248, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...range the fact that French young people use to see each others in the cafe and spen...
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Line 3, column 385, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...nd drinking. With my Italian friends we use to see each other outside, near the sea...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, then, therefore, whereas, while, for example, i think, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1941.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55633802817 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56111462412 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49765258216 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 611.1 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.1344086022 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.8352611607 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.75 100.406767564 161% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.5 20.6045352989 172% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.53405017921 154% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141604983425 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0606615967862 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0324786876052 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0815029154997 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0259613559734 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 11.7677419355 151% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.87 58.1214874552 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.76 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.0537634409 159% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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