TPO-04 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The first car came into market in 19th century when the technology was not developed too much. As the technology developing the number of cars increases with the same rate. In my opinion, there will be more cars in use than there are today. Nowadays, 8 out of 10 persons have car; as the population increases the cars will also be increase. Secondly, it is get easier to make new cars because the technology increases as time going on.
Indeed, cars use depend on the population. We have 2/3 cars on the earth as comparing with the world’s population. And the population increases with a certain rate in a year. Example: If the world’s population increases with 0.5% of the total population now then world’s population will be increase by 2% within 20 years. So, cars will be more in use than there are today.
Furthermore, we are living in a technological era. The technology increases as the time going on. Nowadays, it Is very easy to make a new car with the help of technology. So, the number of cars increases as the technology developing. Example: currently, we are using the cars which run with the help of petrol or diesel. According to the new technology, in future, we will use the solar energy as our car’s fuel but it is not fully developed technology yet. Once, we get achieve this technology then it will be easier to make new cars.
In inference, the number of cars in use depends on the population. The number of cars in use will be more as the population increases within 20 years. In addition, the cars in use also depends on the technology. I strongly believe that the cars in use will be more within 20 years that there are today.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... technology was not developed too much. As the technology developing the number of...
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...iesel. According to the new technology, in future, we will use the solar energy as our ca...
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Message: “Once” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... is not fully developed technology yet. Once, we get achieve this technology then it...
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Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
... The number of cars in use will be more as the population increases within 20 year...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, then, in addition, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 43.0788530466 35% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1377.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 299.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60535117057 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75590154842 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 212.727598566 58% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.411371237458 0.524837075471 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 445.5 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.9209281954 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 65.5714285714 100.406767564 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.2380952381 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2380952381 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207550829402 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0916396497403 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0707556196488 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15832760767 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0349400263955 0.0645574589148 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 11.7677419355 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.87 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.5 8.01818996416 81% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 86.8835125448 47% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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