Nowadays people spend more time to relax and less time to work than before. I disagree with the statement that people today allocate excessive time on things they like to do, such as entertainment, rather than doing things they should do, such as work. I think that it is normal for people to spend more time to relax, especially with the increasing development of technology at present.
People have the right to enjoy life and no blame should be attached to it when people spend more time relaxing than working. It is a commen sense that life includes work; however, human cannot work everyday and enjoy no personal leisure time. Human, unlike robots, need relaxation to revive themselves from arduous work. Besides, no critic should be made when a person spend time to enjoy life instead of working. Normally, a person works five days a week and spend weekends to enjoy life, spending time participating in sports, reading books and companying family. The weekends are spare time allocated from life exclusively for relaxation. The five workdays are designed for work purpose. Nonetheless, people should not be blamed for spend more than two days a week to rest and work less than five days in a week.
Technology in contemporary makes it possible for people to spend less time on work than before. With advanced technology, workers nowadays can work more efficient than before, which allows them to spend less time on a same amount of work than before. In addition, the participation of robots in work liberates immense people from labor force, which enable people to spend work less. For example, farmers nowadays cultivate about 100 hectors land with only one person and several machines, which is far more efficient than before. A farmer managed 1 hector land at most in 1960 in China. Besides, the introduction of robots in car manufacturing industry reduces human involvement to one tenth of prerobot time. A manufactory line require approximately 100 skilled workers in the 1950s; whereas, it only needs around 10 technicions to manage the production of robots.
In conclusion, I oppose the claim that people today spend too much time on peosonal enjoyment than working. One reason is that relaxing and enjoying life should not be stigametized. Another reason is that technology today allows people to spend less time in work and spare more time to enjoy life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 199, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...cludes work; however, human cannot work everyday and enjoy no personal leisure time. Hum...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, however, if, nonetheless, so, whereas, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 43.0788530466 42% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1983.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99496221662 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6028013862 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.47355163728 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 626.4 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.5596857926 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4285714286 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9047619048 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259768023758 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0873603220864 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117336837989 0.0737576698707 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204460699031 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.138599501123 0.0645574589148 215% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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