Time is a mystery which has always helped to organize the whole universe in a particular series. We organize each and every bit of our life according to the time. So, I disagree that people spend too much time on personal enjoyment. If we look back and compare the development of science and technology in the world, we would understand that man isn't wasting his time for personal enjoyment. I would say that, Man, A social animal organizes things in such a way that he makes time for himself when it is needed.
To start with, In this transient world, where people work so hard to build their family and also participate in betterment of society, they don't have extra time to spend for over enjoyment. Youngsters have been the biggest support in the development of country's economy and no one can deny the fact. When the youth are so actively participating and taking responsibilities to solve the country's problem, they have the power to bring revolution in the world. I would like to put forward a case filed by PETA organization against the traditional and cultural bull tamed game in South India called as "Jallikattu". This is when thousands and thousands of youngsters from all over the state came forward protesting this and demanded for the conduct of game. The supreme court of India had to reconsider the decision and granted the permission. After witnessing this, it is clear that people are taking responsibility in a country's issues too.
Added to this, when we see the development in various fields like science, technology, engineering and mathematics, I would say that people are contributing for a better tomorrow. There are myriad examples to consider. For instance, in early days medical field was not advanced and we had to wait for days and weeks to get a simple result of blood test. But now, immediate results are possible which shows the advancement in the field of science. In olden days, there were fewer facilities to communicate news. Comparatively speaking, media is one of the fastest medium of communication currently which shows advancement in technology. Of course there are pros and cons in every invention. But, the advantages outweighs the disadvantages and there is improvement in every sector only because people are doing the things they should do.
Admittedly, there are justifications by the people who argue that technology has made man sedentary. We have to agree that as the technology develops, we should also accept that there are both advantages and drawbacks. But when you see the development in field of medical, science, technology and engineering, the effort and time people put in the research, the discoveries and inventions cope with it. In light to this, reinforcing the idea how man has made the world a better place for living, there is nothing wrong in taking time for personal enjoyment for sometime.
With the aforementioned facts, it is clearly seen by the development of Science and technology, Man has always been a responsible social animal actively involved in finding ways and means for a better future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, for instance, of course, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2578.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 515.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00582524272 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96997003831 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508737864078 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 813.6 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4681602883 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.12 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.52 5.45110844103 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15673102148 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0432087352966 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0727257354003 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0766098758036 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.039826421106 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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