TPO-05 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.Use specific reasons and examples to suppo

The lifestyle of people is changing drastically with a time. Definition of lifestyle is different for each. Old age people spend their time by watching a tv or reading a newspaper. Youth basically focuses on their career to make after life better and children spend time by doing different activities. Technology has changed the lifestyle of people. I support that people today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.

Today's youth generation want to enjoy their life rather than concentrating on a career. They spend so much time by watching tv series, movie or partying with friends. Youth love to play games on a computer and roaming with friends the whole night before exams. These have negative consequences on their results. One of my roommates was topper during the first two semesters. But now he is addicted to gaming, partying with friends and goes on long tour by bunking college. Due to these, he spends less time on studies. So the result degraded too much compare to first two semesters. Nowadays people who are working in a company always wait for holidays so that they can go outside and enjoy their life. So many people watch movies during their job time and don't do work which is assigned to them. People don't like to work but they want to spend time for personal enjoyment. In my father's company, some people are always waiting to leave earlier and always want leave for 2-3 days so that they can visit different places. The growth of the country mainly depends on youth because they are the most energetic, enthusiastic and creative people. If they do their job properly then country's growth can be tremendous. People spend too much time on playing games on mobile phones or on social sites like Instagram, Facebook, Whatsapp for personal enjoyment. This habit affects them too much. Nowadays people are not interested in their job or work but more interested in doing other things.

To conclude, according to me people should spend leisure time on personal enjoyment and concentrate more on the things they should do. So that can also spend time on personal enjoyment doing things and also concentrate on there work. Too much time on personal enjoyment is not good.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, then, thus, as to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1880.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88311688312 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5049063005 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490909090909 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 566.1 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.8785869418 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.3076923077 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8076923077 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.65384615385 5.45110844103 30% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.420255261212 0.236089414692 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119585707598 0.076458572812 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.149523037976 0.0737576698707 203% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.372484396394 0.150856017488 247% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0962754551195 0.0645574589148 149% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.43 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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