TPO-05 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.Use specific reasons and examples to suppo

I believe that our generation devotes plenty of time for their own individual pleasure rather than taking up responsibilities and doing what needs to be done. There are several reasons behind this trend which is explained in the following passages.
Firstly, the explosion of technology has made man an idle one. For instance, television can make us spend long duration of in front of it instead for doing other jobs. Similarly, fast food delivery has taken the place where within seconds food is delivered at our place. However, like the two sides of a coin the negative side is also occurs. People become obese because of their sedentary lifestyle.
Secondly, the financial situation has increased in most families and the younger generation need not work to bring money .Therefore there is no need to study or the importance of education is reduced. Earlier the economic standards and were low due to the global advancements it has become easier for many. Hence, people go and enjoy for themselves.
Thirdly, the hectic and competitive worlds demands more form their employees which seems difficult for them. This has caused people to take long breaks from their working schedule. To illustrate technology companies like google, Facebook they require a lot of work to be done which makes it lot harder for the employees eventually they take overseas trips.
To conclude , as the world advances and takes its strong leaps of greater achievement there will always be another side facing its negative side. People would turn away from all the hardships they have done to enjoy because ultimately this running has no end and man gets tired.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, similarly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1371.0 1977.66487455 69% => OK
No of words: 272.0 407.700716846 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04044117647 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58197850423 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.661764705882 0.524837075471 126% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3904894719 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.4 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1333333333 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128506737329 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0376864270021 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0441693801822 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0688595996891 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0429659882087 0.0645574589148 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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