There are certain considerations or factors that everyone can take into account to investigate and examine the impact of advertisements on young children. I certainly agree that television advertising directed toward children should be forbidden. Someone can consciously weigh the pros and cons of each side. The explanations go as follows.
Firstly, television advertising can waste parents’ money. These days, because of the world economical criticism, all parents have to work hard to make money for clothes, foods, and other things that are essential for a family. In this circumstance, parents have to save their money and prevent from any unwanted wasting. Most of the advertisers now use an excellent visual and audio effect to offer persuasive programs, and so attract children to purchase their products. Because of this, children should force their parents to devote money and buy something new, and so budget limitation can be one of the prominent and crucial consequence.
Furthermore, avoiding from physical and psychological difficulties is another noticeable reason. All parents perfectly understand that the ages of two to five are very critical for children to grow and become a healthy adult. Based on a research, which has been carried out by Society Department of Utah University in 2016, more than 60% of the advertisements directed toward children are oriented for candy and junk food. This food can be the origin of several thorny problems such as overweight, malnutrition, and hypertension. Therefore, it is crystal clear that impeding mentioned advertisements would be necessary to hinder those sophisticated and problematic issues.
Admittedly, there are some justifications by one who argues that these advertisements have some benefits and they should be allowed. Chiefly, almost all advertisements are very innovative, and hence they can aid and abet children to extend their experience to be more creative. However, still I affirm that advertisements aimed for children should not be permitted. Although advertisements have some profits, these advantages can be neglected. Plus, there are dozens of instructive or informative cartoons and animations that can employ instead of told advertisements to extend children ability to be more inventive.
Due to aforementioned ground, all folk should bear in mind that television advertising is not beneficial for children. Participation of learning and healthiness are two prime and conspicuous supports.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
some issues with the reason three: 'advertisements are very innovative, and hence they can aid and abet children to extend their experience to be more creative. '. The topic is for 2-5 years kids, better to say something like:
Admittedly, there are some justifications by one who argues that advertisements told customers some useful information, so the parents can purchase kids stuff accordingly. However, children in this age are vulnerable with unformed and unprotected minds. They will treat anything received as reality....
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 23 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 377 350
No. of Characters: 2052 1500
No. of Different Words: 223 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.406 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.443 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.144 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 124 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.952 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.562 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.381 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.286 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.517 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.044 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, still, therefore, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2120.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => OK
Chars per words: 5.62334217507 4.8611393121 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25082951696 2.67179642975 122% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586206896552 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 662.4 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4807813022 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.952380952 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9523809524 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.71428571429 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211980572908 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690162744526 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668681115787 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127461664601 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0399976640792 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 58.1214874552 64% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.02 10.9000537634 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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