Are our children getting less creative? My answer is no,our technology is growing just as our children are growing. We need to treat technology as assistant to help to correct and realize our creative mind, as it is born to be.
First of all, technology enables us to attach to the spectacular world in an easier way, which inspire us to change the former ideas and discover new ones. In the ancient, people have no access to collect and renew the information, so their horizon is limited to a narrow space. Therefore, their innovation has to be limited to a certain area without opportunities to touch the extra space, just as the western have no idea what the eastern looks like until they invent the boat and canvas to travel to the other side of the earth. However, when it comes to the modern technology, we have numerous chances to get access to what we want at once, even in the thousands miles away.
In addition, we need to rely on these technology inventions to realize our creative and even crazy minds. When somebody comes up with an idea about flying before, people surrounding him only thought he is crazy but not creative. In the contrary, if somebody comes up an new idea about flying besides airplanes, we may think him to be smart or romantic. He also has the ability to realize his thought to become an astronomer or an engineer.
What’s more, the technology could bring all the creative ideas together and combine them to be a more mature one. Take our most far- reaching invention- the Internet as an example,there are a number of approaches to converge our ideas and the scholars could communicate and even debate in the blog. Let the creative ideas crush to each other. The modern technology is an indispensable part for our society to develop. When facing all of the challenges, all of what we need to do is to take the most use of the technology and apply our creative ideas completely without regret.
In conclusion, how to best control our technology is the most serious thing what we need to worry about. Even though there may be sometime people are addicted to an more comfortable life and finally lose the passion to change the world, I maintain that technology has more advantages than disadvantages. We have offer technology the function to realize our dreams, and we need to take advantage of it. Never lose your heart and keep it on the way.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: , our
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Suggestion: a
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Suggestion: , there
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Suggestion: all the
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Suggestion: to the best
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Suggestion: a
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, however, if, look, may, so, therefore, as to, in addition, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1971.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67061611374 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62961114761 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514218009479 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 638.1 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6981024326 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.55 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0944822080998 0.236089414692 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0382870815456 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0379664036425 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0618282893011 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0384711304789 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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