Some people believe that colleges should allocate their finance into libraries and classes since this would directly lead to professional advancements. However, I subscribe to the view that sports and social activities are equally important.
First, sports will help students retain their physical and mental health. For most of the students studying is a sedentary job, they sit on their desks for several hours, doing their assignments, and spent additional several hours sitting in the classrooms listening to the lectures. As a result, they have not only become unfit and uncoordinated but also suffer from different mental conditions such as depression and anxiety. Physical exercises will undoubtedly help students remain fit. It is also perfectly known that doing physical exercises lowers blood pressure, and hence, decrease the possibility of heart conditions. Moreover, sports can help students ventilate their anger and soothe their nerves, and thus, have a healthier mental life.
Second, social activities can introduce new subjects to students. Socializing with their peers, students can learn about new topics and as a result, they can broaden their thought limits. For example, I learned that I was interested in neuroscience_ the major I am going to study for my PHD_ when attending a weekly student meeting at university, while I was a physics student.
On the other hand, it could be a detriment to students to spend most of their times getting involved in different sports teams and numerous discussion groups unrelated to their majors. This way, they can easily get distracted, and hence lack concentration on their study materials. For instance, one of my friends attended the music group at the University, he failed most of his courses for two successive semesters, and finally, he was so depressed and decided to quit. He could neither pursue his education nor become a musician. I believe this would never happen if he could manage his time more efficiently. This way he could both be a good student and make a talented musician.
To sum up, I believe that advantages of funding on sports and social activities outweigh its disadvantages. Students benefit from involving in sports and social activities as much as they benefit from attending classes at the university because they can retain their physical and mental health, and learn about new topics.
- TPO_31_Integrated Writing 80
- TPO-25 - Integrated Writing Task 85
- TPO 01 Integrated Writing 81
- TPO30-integrated writing 81
- TPO 08_ Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 125, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...involving in different sports teams and a large number of discussion groups unrelated to their ma...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, such as, as a result, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2014.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24479166667 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77739960533 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549479166667 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5151592674 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2105263158 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.36842105263 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.096117306773 0.236089414692 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0361052230547 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0425365591524 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0762545567058 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0535519315969 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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