Nowadays, children are exposed to abundant computer games like Starcraft and dota which always take them a great deal of fun. Chinldren are too crazy about them so that some claims that playing computer games is a waste of time and children should not be allowed to play them. From my perspective, however, this point of view is arbitrary and not reasonable. Playing computer games is also a beneficial activity. My reasons and examples are given below.
Initially, by playing computer games, children can acquire abundant knowledge. As is known to all, to make themselves become more real, games are always consist of up-to-date knowledge such as pyschology, physics and biology. Players can learn the knowledge unnoticeably. Take the Call of Duty as an example, weapons used by the players really exsist in the reality. If children start to play the game, they will be familiar with these weapons and be alarmed in the future. Additionally, the scence of the game changes frequently which allows children to have impression of these parts of the world.
Besides, children can learn how to work in groups. Many a computer game requires player cooperating with each other to face the challenge. To pass the levels, players have to work together and shoulder different responsiblities which cultivate their team spirit. For instance, there is a famous game called Minecraft. Players use diffrent tiny blocks to build some things like tall buildings. Usually, it needs up to millions of blocks to build a palace which require hundreds of players work together to get it done. This kind of task will undoubtely develop children's steam spirit.
Admittedly, I am not denying that playing games is a time consuming activity. Some believe that children who play too much games cannot do well in their school work and fail the competitive edge in the future. Nevertheless, I holds that not only a A-level student but also a talented player can be successful in recent years. Wings, a team of Dota, won nearly 10 million dollar as a chimpion in TI6. That's why I suugest that by playing computergames, people can also pave the way for the success.
In a nutshell, playing games is not a a time waster. It is not only because children can extent their outlook and inject new passion and energy into life but also because they will be aware of what team spirit is which is significant beneficial for their future career.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , games
...all, to make themselves become more real,games are always consist of up-to-date knowle...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'consisted'.
Suggestion: consisted
...elves become more real,games are always consist of up-to-date knowledge such as pyschol...
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Suggestion: Take
...rs can learn the knowledge unnoticeably.Take the Call of Duty as an example, weapons...
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
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Suggestion: Some
...ying games is a time consuming activity.Some believe that children who play too much...
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Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
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Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'hold'
Suggestion: hold
...ive edge in the future. Nevertheless, I holds that not only a A-level student but als...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
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Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'a' or 'a' is left.
Suggestion: a; a
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, look, nevertheless, really, so, well, for instance, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2014.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98514851485 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76684846821 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544554455446 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 614.7 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.8003515096 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.9047619048 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2380952381 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.80952380952 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273672997365 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0871698811675 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0904612503801 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157295892625 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0869216482611 0.0645574589148 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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