TPO-11 - Independent Writing Task Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?Use specific reasons and examples to support you

Knowledge and Acedemic subjects act as an important role in the future of the people who are loooking for professionality, money, and competence. In my view, It is better to have knowledge in specific subject rather that having broad knowledge in any academic subjects for sevral reasons.

First, today proffessional people have more chance to survive in the academy and economy. People beleive they do need to learn several subjects in order to be professional, However, no one is able to learn all the thing about this widespread and vast science. For example, when I was in the under graduate level, I started to study about any thing in electrical engineering as well as bioelectronic. At first, it seems easy to understand but, In high presure of the newly developed technologies, I understand the true road map is nuot actualy learning any thing. In addition, if one concentrate on one subject one has more toime to be professional in that topic. In the graduate level I understood the future of me depends on my professionality in specic subjects. So I started to learn a lot about specific subject in Artificial Intelligence.

Second, most of people today strive for more money and welfare however if you don;t have professional background in specific subject you are not able to manage this issue. For instance, hen i was in the graduate level I selected some specific and practical course in the microprosesors and image processing. Since the companeys in our require professional people to manage their image recognition as well as software coding, Finally, I had alot of chances to select my future job. In addition, If you understand the specific science and intensify your resume with many papers you have more chance in graduate level addmission.

Third, people in the compenies and in the society compete with each other and one candidate who has more knowledge in specific subject is winner. In other hand, if you are not professional and by wandering from one topic to the other you will ruin your future even though you try very hard to be successful. Since science is very broad today being professional is possible only with understanding specific science.

In conclusion I beleive job today learning many subjects and being professional in all of them not onlt is not possible but also it can distract your attention to be professional and rich in the future.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 86, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...ortant role in the future of the people who are loooking for professionality, money, an...
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Line 3, column 339, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'anything'?
Suggestion: anything
...raduate level, I started to study about any thing in electrical engineering as well as bi...
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Line 3, column 553, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'anything'?
Suggestion: anything
... true road map is nuot actualy learning any thing. In addition, if one concentrate on one...
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Line 3, column 768, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y professionality in specic subjects. So I started to learn a lot about specific ...
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Line 5, column 9, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
... in Artificial Intelligence. Second, most of people today strive for more money and welfare...
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Line 5, column 191, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...to manage this issue. For instance, hen i was in the graduate level I selected so...
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Line 7, column 309, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ugh you try very hard to be successful. Since science is very broad today being profe...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'third', 'well', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'as well as', 'in my view']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.250569476082 0.229887763892 109% => OK
Verbs: 0.134396355353 0.158761421928 85% => OK
Adjectives: 0.118451025057 0.0866891130778 137% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0432801822323 0.046263068375 94% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0660592255125 0.0685040099705 96% => OK
Prepositions: 0.141230068337 0.118717715034 119% => OK
Participles: 0.0205011389522 0.0351676179071 58% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.94845362394 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0341685649203 0.0309702414327 110% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0683371298405 0.0887237588012 77% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00455580865604 0.0209618222197 22% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.00683371298405 0.0139019557991 49% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2390.0 2387.08602151 100% => OK
No of words: 401.0 408.028673835 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.96009975062 5.86048508987 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48200974243 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.351620947631 0.338922669872 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.269326683292 0.251872472559 107% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.201995012469 0.174417080927 116% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.122194513716 0.112833075102 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94845362394 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486284289277 0.524397521467 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 52.7730947734 59.2087087015 89% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 23.5882352941 20.5533526081 115% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.8641957656 48.84282405 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.588235294 120.699889404 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5882352941 20.5533526081 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.941176470588 0.644075263715 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.54480286738 126% => OK
Readability: 50.5209036233 45.7405998639 110% => OK
Elegance: 1.69158878505 1.45489161554 116% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21199123836 0.300154397459 71% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.101938800725 0.103427244359 99% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0529697529693 0.0752933317313 70% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.572933140456 0.497263757937 115% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.140249443735 0.151897553556 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.099667691249 0.114077575197 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0395963161011 0.0781384742642 51% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.407221196468 0.336927656856 121% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0457228383768 0.067059652881 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147909626594 0.210909579961 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0501873726132 0.0618886996521 81% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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