TPO-11 - Independent Writing Task Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?Use specific reasons and examples to support you

Internet connection is considered one of the most important aspects in our lives. Nowadays, we have access to internet at anytime and anywhere. More than half of our daily activities are related to internet. I am sure that many people will agree that tremendous information will get many people in a problem, while other might disagree with that. I, however, believe that internet will help us on daily basis. I believe that for two important reasons, which I will demonstrate in the following essay.
To begin with, much information will help us to expand our horizons. Every day, we need much information to help us improve our selves. Many people can get information about many topics or any field through internet. For example, I have a little girl, she is five years old. She used to use her tablet every day. In addition, in her daycare she used to use the internet connection to get her homework done. I recognized that my daughter would able to get much information in different aspects via internet. Moreover, she would able to learn how to do math, gain many experience about different animals and plants, and she learned how to cook by herself. This is because the internet. I believe that internet was the secret behind the skills that my daughter has. This experience taught me that young people especially students will get many information through internet they will be able to improve their skills and expand their horizon. As a result, they can grantee a better future because this information will reflect positive in their practice life after graduation.

In addition, we can get our work done more easily by having much information. We have to deal with many hard situations everyday during the work. I believe that we have to have a good base of information to help us to solve any problem. For instance, I am working as a pharmacist technician in a big company in New York. I have internet source at my desk at work. Every day, I used to face tough situations like many questions from patients. So, I used to use the internet to get the answer accurate for all of these questions. In addition, some times before dispensing and medications I back to the internet to get many information about the medication. For example, I would able to know much information about drug -drug interactions, over dose, instructions of different medications, dosage forms, and medications uses. This is a good and efficient way to help the patient. Moreover, this is the easy way to get your work done. On the other hand, in the past before the internet, you required to search at hundreds of books to get your information, which took us too long. Also, it was waste of time.
In conclusion, I strongly agree that people who have valuable information from internet will be more professional in their life. This is because they will get their work done easier than the past, and because they will be able to expand their horizons.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 411, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...t internet will help us on daily basis. I believe that for two important reasons,...
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Line 2, column 562, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun experience seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much experience', 'a good deal of experience'.
Suggestion: much experience; a good deal of experience
...ould able to learn how to do math, gain many experience about different animals and plants, and...
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Line 2, column 836, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...ung people especially students will get many information through internet they will ...
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Line 2, column 836, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much information', 'a good deal of information'.
Suggestion: much information; a good deal of information
...ung people especially students will get many information through internet they will be able to i...
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Line 4, column 121, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... have to deal with many hard situations everyday during the work. I believe that we have...
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Line 4, column 617, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...dications I back to the internet to get many information about the medication. For e...
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Line 4, column 617, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much information', 'a good deal of information'.
Suggestion: much information; a good deal of information
...dications I back to the internet to get many information about the medication. For example, I wo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.0752688172 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2431.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 509.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77603143418 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67631382587 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.445972495088 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 775.8 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 27.0 9.59856630824 281% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.6003584229 160% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.2406713328 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.6666666667 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4242424242 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.24242424242 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176952131879 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0485594809129 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417382196281 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115655955787 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0274053552898 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.8 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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