TPO-11 - Independent Writing Task Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?Use specific reasons and examples to support you

There are different views on the internet providing information to people. Some people think that the internet is used to gain more valuable information. While others point to, getting too much data from the internet may cause problems. In my opinion, I think the internet gives most significant data.

First, the internet helps people to learn or know about different things in the world. Moreover, one can enhance their skills by knowing about different things in the world. For instance, When I was studying undergraduate in India, I used to learn more information about different cultures and traditions of different countries. As I was not living in that particular country, I don't know exactly what is their tradition and culture. Therefore, I learned a lot of information from different fields which helped me to increase my knowledge.

Second, in many different fields, one can gain more skills by using the internet. For instance, on the internet, we can have a lot of information related to news, films, music, sports, science, social, studies in different areas of education e.c.t. As a result, one can gain more skills which required for their growth in career, by using the internet. Besides, it also provides apps which are used to communicate with others very easily like Whatsapp, facebook e.t.c.which increases easy conversation. Furthermore, the internet provides valuable information for less cost. When compared to the textbooks, we can get a lot of data for less price.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that people can gain a lot of important information from the internet which helps to gain a lot of knowledge and improve their skills in various fields.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 190, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ion. While others point to, getting too much data from the internet may cause proble...
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Line 3, column 381, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ot living in that particular country, I dont know exactly what is their tradition an...
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Line 5, column 12, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...to increase my knowledge. Second, in many different fields, one can gain more skills by usi...
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Line 7, column 126, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... from the internet which helps to gain a lot of knowledge and improve their skill...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, while, for instance, i think, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1414.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 274.0 407.700716846 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16058394161 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8260149483 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 212.727598566 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521897810219 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.9511298034 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2666666667 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2666666667 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.86666666667 5.45110844103 181% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220961792682 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.091782185911 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0722160186559 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153575425516 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0724909474812 0.0645574589148 112% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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