“The bond that links your true family is not one of blood, but of respect and joy in each other’s life. Rarely do members of one family grow up under the same roof” reflecting us that the family members nowadays become less connected to each other. The issue whether the extended family is less important now in the past or not aroused much controversy between people with different ages, and different perspectives. Some contend think that the extent family now has a greatly significant role in their family life due to their support and their caring. However, in my opinion, I completely agree that they are less important today than in the past due to the help of modern technology in our society, and maintaining our privacy.
To begin with, the importance of our extended family are less significantly now than the past since in the past sometimes we needed them in some help such as caring for our children while we are working, or helping in housework duties. But due to the modern technology, we do not need them as much; we can get help within a short period of times such as babysitter for our kids, and hiring someone else to help us with the family work. The technologies nowadays enhance the people living condition, making their life more convenient. Another important thing that extended family can do is providing the information and educates family members. However, in modern society, we have schools to get our educations. We have several methods such as Television, and Internets. This resource can be easily accessed. We don’t depend right now on our family member to get knowledge. The technology cleared the barrier that prevented us from leading a convenient life.
In addition to modern technology, nowadays people tend to live alone with their small care family rather than live with many families’ members with a big family to avoid any problems.Therefore; they have their own circle of communication, all of that helps them to maintain their own privacy. In the past, the family members want to live with each other, and wanted to create the intimacy atmosphere, as the result, anyone could interfere with the others’ opinion without caring about what the other wanted to do. But now due to the modern society, everyone lives in a different city than the other, and everyone does not like to let the other know about their own things to maintain their privacy, and preventing distraction from other people when taking a decision. For example, I had a chance to live in U S A back in 2006. I was living in rural are since the entire family member live together, when I got the lottery, all my family members knew about it, kept advise me not to go since they thought that I will leave them and it is not good for me to live alone, their opinions distracted me, and sometimes affected on me. It was a big challenge. In that time, I wished to maintain my privacy.” Privacy - like eating and breathing - is one of life's basic requirements.” Once said Katherine reflecting us that the importance of privacy.
As all things considered, while it is true that our extended family create the intimacy atmosphere among each other, but when it comes to maintaining our own privacy, and the development of the technology, we do not need longer for their help.
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Essay evaluation report
the importance of our extended family are less significantly now
the importance ...is less significantly now
our extended family create the intimacy
our extended families create the intimacy
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No. of Words: 571 350
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 571 350
No. of Characters: 2635 1500
No. of Different Words: 247 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.888 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.615 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.462 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 183 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.792 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.166 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.417 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.294 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.437 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.17 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
'The bond that links your true fami...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ted us from leading a convenient life. In addition to modern technology, nowada...
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Line 5, column 190, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Therefore
...with a big family to avoid any problems.Therefore; they have their own circle of communic...
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Line 5, column 190, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...with a big family to avoid any problems.Therefore; they have their own circle of communic...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing us that the importance of privacy. As all things considered, while it ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'for example', 'in addition', 'such as', 'in my opinion', 'it is true', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.200305810398 0.229887763892 87% => OK
Verbs: 0.15749235474 0.158761421928 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0886850152905 0.0866891130778 102% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0550458715596 0.046263068375 119% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0886850152905 0.0685040099705 129% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.117737003058 0.118717715034 99% => OK
Participles: 0.0336391437309 0.0351676179071 96% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.77341378709 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0351681957187 0.0309702414327 114% => OK
Particles: 0.00152905198777 0.00188951952338 81% => OK
Determiners: 0.085626911315 0.0887237588012 97% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00764525993884 0.0209618222197 36% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00917431192661 0.0139019557991 66% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3340.0 2387.08602151 140% => OK
No of words: 571.0 408.028673835 140% => OK
Chars per words: 5.84938704028 5.86048508987 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88831323574 4.48200974243 109% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.332749562172 0.338922669872 98% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.220665499124 0.251872472559 88% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.169877408056 0.174417080927 97% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.108581436077 0.112833075102 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77341378709 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450087565674 0.524397521467 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 53.5791499346 59.2087087015 90% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6684587814 106% => OK
Sentence length: 25.9545454545 20.5533526081 126% => OK
Sentence length SD: 82.9557907752 48.84282405 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.818181818 120.699889404 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9545454545 20.5533526081 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.545454545455 0.644075263715 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 48.021095367 45.7405998639 105% => OK
Elegance: 1.16751269036 1.45489161554 80% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.395559505936 0.300154397459 132% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.119124018371 0.103427244359 115% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.108628882355 0.0752933317313 144% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.477756634555 0.497263757937 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.201219955276 0.151897553556 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156556812518 0.114077575197 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0892417379546 0.0781384742642 114% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.450777314538 0.336927656856 134% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0504821635372 0.067059652881 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.300386300032 0.210909579961 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.056494355076 0.0618886996521 91% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.6433691756 139% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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