Money is important in today's life. It is everyone's dream to become independent. Some people believe that we have to teach our children n their young age. Others agree that we should let the children free until the age of eighteen. I strongly believe that we need to teach our children later in their life due to following reasons.
First of all, children are in the age that it is better for them to know how to play,exercise and let their own strength to maximize. They need to have life in order to know which extraordinary practice they would like to pursue because as an adult we all need it. We will have extra time that we need to have for our own.Either playing piano, doing exercise, dancing are helpful for adults to refresh their health.
Moreover, students need to study instead of thinking how to manage their money. They need to focus on their studying and other responsibilities, in future they have enough time to think of their money. If I teach them during their childhood I will make them pessimistic about some of their friends due to the fact, they as kids will not be mature enough.They might become crazy because of simple issues.
Furthermore, if I tell my child how to manage his money,I am in some how acting like stingy person and it makes my child believe that it is good to be stingy. However, in real life I am thinking economically but I am not stingy at all. I can make them responsible in many other ways.
All in all, based on what I stated above, it is obvious that I do not think that manging money will help children to be a better adult.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: All in all, based on what I stated above, it is obvious that I do not think that manging money will help children to be a better adult.
Error: manging Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
More compound or complex sentences/clauses wanted. Try not to use pronouns like 'you, I, they...' as the subject of a sentence. Look as an example:
They need to have life in order to know which extraordinary practice
they would like to pursue because as an adult
we all need it.
We will have extra time that
we need to have for our own
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 18 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 294 350
No. of Characters: 1254 1500
No. of Different Words: 145 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.141 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.265 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.306 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 70 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 44 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 28 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 11 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.236 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.333 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.357 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.611 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.229 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 85, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , exercise
...t is better for them to know how to play,exercise and let their own strength to maximize....
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 323, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Either
...a time that we need to have for our own.Either playing piano, doing exercise, dancing ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 355, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: They
... they as kids will not be mature enough.They might become crazy because of simple is...
^^^^
Line 7, column 56, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , I
... I tell my child how to manage his money,I am in some how acting like stingy perso...
^^
Line 7, column 65, Rule ID: SOME_HOW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'somehow'?
Suggestion: somehow
...y child how to manage his money,I am in some how acting like stingy person and it makes ...
^^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.153605015674 0.229887763892 67% => OK
Verbs: 0.200626959248 0.158761421928 126% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0940438871473 0.0866891130778 108% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0407523510972 0.046263068375 88% => OK
Pronouns: 0.144200626959 0.0685040099705 210% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.122257053292 0.118717715034 103% => OK
Participles: 0.025078369906 0.0351676179071 71% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.48340269424 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0626959247649 0.0309702414327 202% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0407523510972 0.0887237588012 46% => Some determiners wanted.
Modal_auxiliary: 0.025078369906 0.0209618222197 120% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0188087774295 0.0139019557991 135% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1582.0 2387.08602151 66% => OK
No of words: 290.0 408.028673835 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45517241379 5.86048508987 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.48200974243 92% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.262068965517 0.338922669872 77% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.168965517241 0.251872472559 67% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.110344827586 0.174417080927 63% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0620689655172 0.112833075102 55% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48340269424 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510344827586 0.524397521467 97% => OK
Word variations: 50.5730422447 59.2087087015 85% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6684587814 73% => OK
Sentence length: 19.3333333333 20.5533526081 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.285298842 48.84282405 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.466666667 120.699889404 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 20.5533526081 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.533333333333 0.644075263715 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 36.2298850575 45.7405998639 79% => OK
Elegance: 0.780487804878 1.45489161554 54% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332287953731 0.300154397459 111% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.134260272251 0.103427244359 130% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.075412525462 0.0752933317313 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.591944410454 0.497263757937 119% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.194598671539 0.151897553556 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141699457464 0.114077575197 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0622836675783 0.0781384742642 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.29398690216 0.336927656856 87% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.118352992645 0.067059652881 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197533143225 0.210909579961 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.068745670284 0.0618886996521 111% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.