Although many people thoughts that movies and television may have a positive effect on children or young people behavior as some movies depends on broadcasts good behaviors like they represent that always the peace triumphs over the evil. I find that media and movies have sometimes and may usually a negative effect on young peoples and i'm going to represent many problems.
For instance, there are many kinds of action movies that full of fight and kill, that kinds of movies teach the young people violence in any situation even with friends or mother and father!! they learned to take their rights by violence or when they are feeling annoyed from someone, they gonna to hit him rather than avoid him.
Moreover, there are many movies that should seen by +18 years old adults and they are about the relationship between male and female. If the kid saw such movie, he may think in bad way and this isn't desirable thing.
Much important point that programs and movies attract young people very much and they may lose very much time so, their study may be affected and they won't have time to play games or sports and no time for their hobbies. Moreover, watching TV a lot make attention defect for example when my daughter watched TV i called her but she didn't answer, she wasn't ignored me she simple didn't hear me. Also, while watching TV the kids eat much candies and they are able to gain much weight and their health would be in risk.
In conclusion, watching TV a lot would effect negatively on our children's mind, study and health. we should take care of our kids by tell them about the bad effects of TV, by let them participate in sports like football, basketball and swimming. by encourage them to develop their hobbies like painting , playing music, reading and writing
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1470.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 314.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68152866242 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.2128509888 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.582802547771 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 429.3 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.3689054222 48.9658058833 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.636363636 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5454545455 20.6045352989 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.36363636364 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0218457993188 0.236089414692 9% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00948514109459 0.076458572812 12% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0133160748539 0.0737576698707 18% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0125197585447 0.150856017488 8% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00662112736867 0.0645574589148 10% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.002688172 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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