TPO-16 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In my opinion, I do not agree that traveling in a group with a tour guide is good. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.

To begin with, if we travel with a tour guide the cost to the tour can be increased because the tour guide charges more for a trip. For instance, when I went to Portland in the state of Oregon, I took a tour bus to visit the famous places like the flower garden, Japanese garden, Multnomah waterfalls and Canon beach. The cost per ticket is $100 if, I go to that place with my whole family it costs around like $400 which is expensive. For instance, if I took a rental car, then it costs only $100 for the whole family where I can reduce the cost. Hence, I think going with a tour guide is costlier than going by ourselves.

Second, we cannot enjoy the trip completely because the tour guide asks us to come at a particular time. For example, when my husband and I went to Dubai, we had taken a tour bus where the guide asked us to come within limited time. First, he stopped at the Dubai shopping mall, and he asked us to come within 30 minutes where it is impossible for me to shop during that time. So, I have not enjoyed a lot. If we had gone in a cab or a rental car, we could have a lot of time to enjoy, but with the tour guide, it is difficult to stay long hours in a particular place because he will complete the trip within that day.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is better to go on our own rather than going with a tour guide because we can spend a lot of time in a particular place and it also reduces the cost.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'if' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'ifs'.
Suggestion: ifs
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, second, so, then, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1287.0 1977.66487455 65% => OK
No of words: 318.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.04716981132 4.8611393121 83% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.19561946342 2.67179642975 82% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471698113208 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 414.0 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8754662151 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4615384615 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3076923077 5.45110844103 189% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117085630201 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553256665735 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.064937320669 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100213825524 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0830847846158 0.0645574589148 129% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.5 58.1214874552 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.51 10.9000537634 60% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.81 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 86.8835125448 46% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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