Once of the Iranian sage, whose names is elude me at a moment, states that if you want to increase your brain ability, there is no better way to explore diferrent regions in the world. Considering this, one can realize the importance of traveling in a human life. But not all kind of travels are not as beneficial as others. In my perspective, if we want to fully exploit the advantage of traveling, it is not rational to go plces with those ridiculous group led by a tour guid. Traveling not only would be more pleasent, but also it is more economical, especially in expensive spot in world like Tokyo, Singapor, Paris, London and so forth.
One reason that I believe this, is that independant traveling can lead to improvment in one's personality. Visiting new places is not at all means that once should be just ralxed,eat, sleep and sometimes go to dull malls! I, personaly, prefer to meet with local people, try to communicate with them, understand their world view. Besides, this gives me feeling of freedom, and it can be percive that all of the mention effects would make me stronger, more thoughtful and patience. However non of them would be provided by those stupid tours which is design merely for comfort loverst!
Another reason I think this way is that, many of these agencies cost a lot of fortune for their service. This is because they need to hire tour leader, book the hotel and airplan ticket, and also their profits. It is obvious they do not carry out those jobs sorely for a grace of God. Therefore, astronomical expenses for a tour which is proposed by traveling agency, is not an appropriate decision for people like me that are on a budget. On the other hand, if you plan to travel on your own, the expenses would dramatically decreas. you just need to buy a ticket and silght sum of money. once can stay at a local hotel and eat the food that other people who live the place eat. It is more economical.
For all the reasons that I have stated, I strongly assume that no one in his or her proper mind will chose vist places in those stupid group. Thanks to the economical cost of independent traveling which is enable each member of society to travel, today, humankind can get familiar with each other and also learn a lot of materials from each other. Pluse, thisprobably could help to reach the peace between nations across the globe.
- TOEFL TPO 14 - Integrated Writing Task 90
- TPO-11 - Independent Writing Task Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?Use specific reasons and examples to support you 50
- tpo 4 independent writing 48
- TPO-11 - Independent Writing Task Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?Use specific reasons and examples to support you 83
- TOEFL TPO 13 - Integrated Writing Task 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 42, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'eluded'.
Suggestion: eluded
...nce of the Iranian sage, whose names is elude me at a moment, states that if you want...
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Line 2, column 89, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ant traveling can lead to improvment in ones personality. Visiting new places is not...
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Line 2, column 178, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , eat
...ll means that once should be just ralxed,eat, sleep and sometimes go to dull malls! ...
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Line 2, column 399, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... of freedom, and it can be percive that all of the mention effects would make me stronger,...
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Line 3, column 536, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: You
...he expenses would dramatically decreas. you just need to buy a ticket and silght su...
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Line 3, column 591, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Once
...o buy a ticket and silght sum of money. once can stay at a local hotel and eat the f...
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Line 4, column 102, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'choose'
Suggestion: choose
...t no one in his or her proper mind will chose vist places in those stupid group. Than...
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Line 4, column 207, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'enabled'.
Suggestion: enabled
... cost of independent traveling which is enable each member of society to travel, today...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, so, therefore, i think, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1944.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58490566038 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5057250219 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570754716981 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 617.4 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0789411939 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.315789474 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3157894737 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.36842105263 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146828455598 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.042836201484 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.031619953478 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0904419397618 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0210548280374 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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