In this advanced era, the vast majorities of companies try to use advertisement in order to sell their products. In my perspective, every company should increase the original quality of their products which they want to represent in posters, billboards, promotions and so on without any exaggeration and sometimes some companies display inexpensive products in order to improve doing business and when people go to buy them, the prices are completely different. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, many billboard and posters on television or magazine depicts information by many exaggerations. Nowadays, we can see commercial an advertisement on the television or a flyer in the street which have unreal informations about the verity of the products. My own experience is a good example of this, Last week I went shopping mall for buying many stuffs, and I brought some cookies which I had seen on the television ad by high qualities. Unfortunately, this cookies did not have a real quality that I have heard on the television. However, sometimes it is not true and the information on the billboards or trailers or posters are correct. Additionally, people every day see and hear many information about products on television or newspapers or other mass media if the characteristics of products are not the same as advertisement it makes them unsatisfied and do not interesting to buy again.
Furthermore, many companies represent their products on television or internet ads by inexpensive price to motivate people to buy them. Many companies when they want to improve their budget and their business, they emphasis in the price of products as cheaper than other companies' products. As I said above, many companies and factories produce lots of products and they do not have a good opportunities to sell their product and they quite know that people are searching for goods and stuff by inexpensive price. For instant, one of my friend last month bought a car of the car company by considering of information on the newspaper about this car, the price of this car by whole of services was $300,000 dollars but when he went car company, he bought this car for $310,000 dollars. As a result, by representing un real information in advertisement, it makes people pessimistic to the kind of advertisements on the television, newspapers, radio and so on.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that most of advertisement have many exaggeration in the quality of their products also unreal information about the price of products. This is because they want to sell their products as soon as or most of factories and companies want to make more money.
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Essay evaluation report by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 16, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun billboard seems to be countable; consider using: 'many billboards'.
Suggestion: many billboards
...in the following essay. To begin with, many billboard and posters on television or magazine d...
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Line 2, column 467, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...on ad by high qualities. Unfortunately, this cookies did not have a real quality tha...
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Line 2, column 697, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...tionally, people every day see and hear many information about products on televisio...
^^^^
Line 2, column 697, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much information', 'a good deal of information'.
Suggestion: much information; a good deal of information
...tionally, people every day see and hear many information about products on television or newspap...
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Line 3, column 390, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'opportunity'?
Suggestion: opportunity
...of products and they do not have a good opportunities to sell their product and they quite kn...
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Line 4, column 67, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun exaggeration seems to be countable; consider using: 'many exaggerations'.
Suggestion: many exaggerations
...believe that most of advertisement have many exaggeration in the quality of their products also u...
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Line 4, column 233, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the factories') or simply say ''most factories''.
Suggestion: most of the factories; most factories
...nt to sell their products as soon as or most of factories and companies want to make more money. ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'i feel', 'in conclusion', 'kind of', 'as a result', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.263265306122 0.229887763892 115% => OK
Verbs: 0.134693877551 0.158761421928 85% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0816326530612 0.0866891130778 94% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0367346938776 0.046263068375 79% => OK
Pronouns: 0.069387755102 0.0685040099705 101% => OK
Prepositions: 0.140816326531 0.118717715034 119% => OK
Participles: 0.0183673469388 0.0351676179071 52% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.08832608782 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0285714285714 0.0309702414327 92% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0857142857143 0.0887237588012 97% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00612244897959 0.0209618222197 29% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0142857142857 0.0139019557991 103% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2702.0 2387.08602151 113% => OK
No of words: 450.0 408.028673835 110% => OK
Chars per words: 6.00444444444 5.86048508987 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48200974243 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.328888888889 0.338922669872 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.277777777778 0.251872472559 110% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.222222222222 0.174417080927 127% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.16 0.112833075102 142% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08832608782 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457777777778 0.524397521467 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 50.7592606235 59.2087087015 86% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6684587814 77% => OK
Sentence length: 28.125 20.5533526081 137% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.6049750372 48.84282405 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 168.875 120.699889404 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.125 20.5533526081 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.6875 0.644075263715 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.54480286738 126% => OK
Readability: 55.9027777778 45.7405998639 122% => OK
Elegance: 1.75423728814 1.45489161554 121% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196637818438 0.300154397459 66% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.154383748007 0.103427244359 149% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0931080524996 0.0752933317313 124% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.560207958985 0.497263757937 113% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.123203851229 0.151897553556 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0956703390206 0.114077575197 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421406701677 0.0781384742642 54% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.415229147564 0.336927656856 123% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.068715246134 0.067059652881 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148315611458 0.210909579961 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00888827421135 0.0618886996521 14% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8870967742 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 8.42114695341 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 13.6433691756 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 16, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun billboard seems to be countable; consider using: 'many billboards'.
Suggestion: many billboards
...in the following essay. To begin with, many billboard and posters on television or magazine d...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 467, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...on ad by high qualities. Unfortunately, this cookies did not have a real quality tha...
^^^^
Line 2, column 697, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...tionally, people every day see and hear many information about products on televisio...
^^^^
Line 2, column 697, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much information', 'a good deal of information'.
Suggestion: much information; a good deal of information
...tionally, people every day see and hear many information about products on television or newspap...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 390, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'opportunity'?
Suggestion: opportunity
...of products and they do not have a good opportunities to sell their product and they quite kn...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 67, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun exaggeration seems to be countable; consider using: 'many exaggerations'.
Suggestion: many exaggerations
...believe that most of advertisement have many exaggeration in the quality of their products also u...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 233, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the factories') or simply say ''most factories''.
Suggestion: most of the factories; most factories
...nt to sell their products as soon as or most of factories and companies want to make more money. ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'i feel', 'in conclusion', 'kind of', 'as a result', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.263265306122 0.229887763892 115% => OK
Verbs: 0.134693877551 0.158761421928 85% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0816326530612 0.0866891130778 94% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0367346938776 0.046263068375 79% => OK
Pronouns: 0.069387755102 0.0685040099705 101% => OK
Prepositions: 0.140816326531 0.118717715034 119% => OK
Participles: 0.0183673469388 0.0351676179071 52% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.08832608782 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0285714285714 0.0309702414327 92% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0857142857143 0.0887237588012 97% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00612244897959 0.0209618222197 29% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0142857142857 0.0139019557991 103% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2702.0 2387.08602151 113% => OK
No of words: 450.0 408.028673835 110% => OK
Chars per words: 6.00444444444 5.86048508987 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48200974243 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.328888888889 0.338922669872 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.277777777778 0.251872472559 110% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.222222222222 0.174417080927 127% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.16 0.112833075102 142% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08832608782 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457777777778 0.524397521467 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 50.7592606235 59.2087087015 86% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6684587814 77% => OK
Sentence length: 28.125 20.5533526081 137% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.6049750372 48.84282405 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 168.875 120.699889404 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.125 20.5533526081 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.6875 0.644075263715 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.54480286738 126% => OK
Readability: 55.9027777778 45.7405998639 122% => OK
Elegance: 1.75423728814 1.45489161554 121% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196637818438 0.300154397459 66% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.154383748007 0.103427244359 149% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0931080524996 0.0752933317313 124% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.560207958985 0.497263757937 113% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.123203851229 0.151897553556 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0956703390206 0.114077575197 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421406701677 0.0781384742642 54% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.415229147564 0.336927656856 123% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.068715246134 0.067059652881 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148315611458 0.210909579961 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00888827421135 0.0618886996521 14% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8870967742 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 8.42114695341 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 13.6433691756 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.