TPO-17 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The advertisements are the best way to show the advantages of the product for many people at the same time. Some people believe that the commercials show the product much better than it is in a real life. Others think that the exact opposite of it. From my point of view, the advertisements are the ideal version of the product for the following reasons.

Above all, the advertisements show only the pros of the product, not the cons. The cost of a commercial of a television is expensive to afford which requires no to include trivial things. No one wants to pay money for people to show their disadvantages for all people. Burger King, as an example, always interpret that their product is the cheapest food with high-quality even though they are unhealthy and small. For example, I never felt saturate after eating the whole two burgers of Burger King.

Furthermore, sometimes the black side of the product repels the consumers which affect badly to the profit of the company. The companies want to show the cons despite its power to destroy the whole company? I do not think so. I remember that when I went to Thailand by the travel company, it has stunning nature and the people were friendly, helpful and kind. The experience was outstanding and gorgeous. But after a few months, I traveled, one of my relatives refused to travel to Thailand because the traveling company said it is dangerous to visit because they have many kidnappers and they suggested to travel another country.

Eventually, the only huge difference between the two products is the advertisement because the qualities of the products from two different companies have only a slight difference because the technology they used is the same. If the company pay more attention to the commercial, they will lose all the customers to the competitor because of that even a full management team working on the commercial to make it ideal. For example, when I choose the clothes, I barely prefer to watch an advertisement before I go to the store.

All in all, the advertisement is the last stage of the success of the product, so, companies have to do it perfect which affects both to the customers and the company.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 159, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...n is expensive to afford which requires no to include trivial things. No one wants...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, so, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1818.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80952380952 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75715194454 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507936507937 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.5611016007 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.6842105263 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8947368421 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.94736842105 5.45110844103 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116738416583 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0369329206049 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.033035196667 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0704271536921 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0257617605919 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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