TPO-17 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

We see myriad of advertisement in Television, radio, web browser. These advertisement are so appealing, pompous than it's related product are. The basic reason, in my opinion, of most aid of the product much better then the product are discussed below.

Firstly, It may be justified as advertising plays major role in impact of marketing and sales. Various company, for instance, hire a popular persons- celebrities, athletics- to focus their product in the consumer rather than in quality of product. In Nepal, there was a Himalaya Gulcose, an enery drink. The brand ambassador of that drink was one of national famous celebrity of Nepal. So, must of the people prefer to buy Himalaya gulcose and it's sale was so high. However, Himalaya gulcose and it's manufacturing plants were inspected by governmental food and nutrition quality department. The investigation issued that the quality and production process of it was so lower than our national standard requirement. Moreover, there were so many food scandals but their advertisement are much better than their products.

Further, advertisement are solely focused on consumer and in order to attract them, there are many products whose advertisement. They advertisement basically focuses on need of the costumer rather than product quality. For example, When I was a child, there was a balmy product for pain. The advertisement showed that it was very effective during any kind of severe pain and weather condition(it represented desired product of most people). The product, however, was not so effective on when applied. Also, there may be marketing competition between the various manufacturing company. Since the product between various manufacturing are basically similar, so they focus on making a good advertisement to transcend other manufacturer.

However, there may be some low profit based company that basically focuses on quality product than advertisement. But such company are rare since most of the company want to make their company solvent and in higher ranking.

Finally, Due to various former reasons, I believe that the most of the company advertisement are more compelling than their real products.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 67, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this advertisement' or 'These advertisements'?
Suggestion: This advertisement; These advertisements
...ment in Television, radio, web browser. These advertisement are so appealing, pompous than its rela...
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Line 1, column 202, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n my opinion, of most aid of the product much better then the product are discuss...
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Line 1, column 209, Rule ID: COMPARISONS_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'better than'?
Suggestion: better than
...inion, of most aid of the product much better then the product are discussed below. Fir...
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Line 3, column 142, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'person'?
Suggestion: person
...s company, for instance, hire a popular persons- celebrities, athletics- to focus their...
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Line 3, column 360, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrity'.
Suggestion: celebrity
...sador of that drink was one of national famous celebrity of Nepal. So, must of the people prefer...
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Line 3, column 492, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e was so high. However, Himalaya gulcose and its manufacturing plants were inspec...
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Line 5, column 461, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ct of most people. The product, however, was not so effective on when applied. Al...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, for example, for instance, kind of, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1841.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39882697947 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98666207086 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527859237537 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.9891136711 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.6666666667 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2380952381 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85714285714 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144517997823 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0490008696351 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0484146251378 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0935705799289 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0595300707746 0.0645574589148 92% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.74 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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