Many people think that students are more influenced by their teachers. They say that student spent more than one-third of their time in the school, so for sure, they will be affected by their teachers especially those little kids. Although I understand their point of view, I have a different opinion. I believe that students are influenced by their friends more because they have the same age, and they spend a lot of time together.
First, friends are usually of the same age, so they share the same way of thinking and same interest. For example, if they are in the elementary stage. They can talk about the same toy they play with, or about a particular superhero character they watched recently in a movie. In general, friends share the same interest, so it is so easy and normal for them to be influenced by each other so quickly. For instant, last week my kindergarten son came home from school asking for a certain toy. I started to take with him about why he wants this exact toy, where he saw it, and what he loved about it. The only answer I got was, one of his friends got this toy and was talking about how fun to play with it, and how much he enjoyed it. My son got affected by his friend's opinion quicker than any other person.
Second, Friends spend a long time together. They spend almost eight hours in the school, maybe one or more hours in training and sometimes few more hours playing together at each other houses. This long time makes it so easy for them to explore each other opinions and influence each other. I can remember from my childhood that my friends' opinions were number one in formatting my own opinion about any subject, My friends were my main resource to get any information I need to know. This simply because we spend a lot of our times together talking, playing, having fun. and also facing our problems.
In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above. I encourage every parent to make sure that their kids' friends are good people. This because they will have the main influence on their kids' behavior and point of views.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...watched recently in a movie. In general, friends share the same interest, so it i...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...quicker than any other person. Second, Friends spend a long time together. They...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
... together talking, playing, having fun. and also facing our problems. In conclusi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, second, so, third, for example, in conclusion, in general, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1694.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54155495979 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29523813088 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501340482574 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.5837227069 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.6666666667 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7619047619 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47619047619 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120322255027 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0447576007196 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0561726651513 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0988871098447 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0810375128601 0.0645574589148 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.98 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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