TPO-18 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Teachers and friends are considered one of the most important aspects of student's lives. Students are in a big touch with their friends and their teacher specially they spend most of their time at school. Some people believe that students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends, while others might disagree. However, when it comes to me I strongly agree that students are more influenced by their friends than their colleges. This is for two important reasons which I will demonstrate in the following paragraphs.

To begin with, students spend more time with their friends. Many students live at dorms; others live in private apartments with their colleges. So, they spend most of their time with these friends. Definitely when you spend long time with someone that will affect on your behavior and your personality. For instance, I have my daughter she is twenty years old. She used to live with their friends at dorm since 5 years ago. I believe that she was so isolated when she was living at our house. On the other hand, when she moved to the university she met many friends there and she started to make a strong relationship with them she became completely different person. I remembered that she now so socialized person and she has sense of humor. In addition, last year she went for her first trip to Paris with her friends. She was so excited and so happy. Moreover, when she wanted to take any critical decision definitely we backed to her closed friends. Nevertheless, in the past, she could not go anywhere without me. Besides, she never took any decision in her whole life. This changes because their friends have a positive influence on her. This is the same situation with their teachers, she could not see her teachers for long time like their friends. So, teachers do not have a big influence on the students. As a result, this change is due the long time that she spent with her friends. On the other hand, her cousin in the same age, but she live with her parents and go to the university Just for lectures. I believe that their friends have no influence on her. This is because they see each other just for couples of hours.

In addition, students have the same interest. Some students like music, succor ball, swimming and arts. So, they can have something in common. This is will be a good way for students to meet and get closer to each others. For example, when I was young I was practice swimming two times every week because I love swimming. I used to go with my roommate to the club every week to swim for two hours, I remember that I had so much fun and I would able to energized. However, our teachers were against us. Furthermore, they claimed that we lost out times at activities that could not help and that will affect negative in our grades. However, I and my friend would able to motivate each other to study more and more after the swimming classes. So, we got a great score by the end of the year. This is because we have the same interest. This experience taught me that friends have the strongest influence of each other.

In sum, I believe that students are more influenced by friends more than teachers. This is because they have the same interest and because they spend more time with each other.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 107.0 43.0788530466 248% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2690.0 1977.66487455 136% => OK
No of words: 584.0 407.700716846 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60616438356 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.91590194646 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36703053471 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.412671232877 0.524837075471 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 812.7 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 28.0 9.59856630824 292% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 40.0 20.6003584229 194% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.2313844554 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.25 100.406767564 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.175 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 30.0 11.8709677419 253% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235154585588 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.072032543929 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0821818365093 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177703312641 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108009739274 0.0645574589148 167% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.87 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.58 8.01818996416 82% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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