Students spend most of time in school with their teachers and friends. Therefore, the question whether they are influenced by their teachers or their friends is debatable. It depends on each student. Some students may like to follow their friends. Other students are impacted by their teachers. In my opinion, most students affected by their teachers. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, teachers are knowledgeable ones. We all acknowledge the purpose of students to go to school is to gain knowledge. General speaking, people cannot have a job without education. Understanding this phenomenon, students try to absorb knowledge as much as possible. While students are studying, they get help directly from their teachers. From valuable information that they are provided, they tend to admire their teachers. As a result, students believe their teachers and feel willingly to follow the advice of their teachers. My own experience is a compelling example of this case. When I was in twelve grade, I did not know which major to choose to apply for the university. I asked my biology teacher, who taught me since I was tenth grade. She told me what was my strengths and weaknesses. Therefore, I could evaluate my ability and chose my major.
Second, due to their experience, career and status, students tend to respect their professors. Everybody has to admit that being a professor is not an easy job, mainly because their responsibility is enormous. Professors have to teach thousands of students, and they must take into account that those students represent the future of society. Therefore, they have to research and learn new things constantly to upgrade their knowledge day by day to help students. To be more specific, I always respect my English teacher than anyone else because even though she is on a verge of seventy years old, she continuously read many kinds of books and learn computer technology in order to help her students effectively. It seems to me that she is a whole world to me just because she gives her knowledge to help me ungrudgingly.
In conclusion, people have different ideas about the question of whether students are more influenced by their teachers or their friends. In my view, for two reasons, which I have just mentioned above, I strongly believe that students are often more influenced by their teachers than their friends.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...evaluate my ability and chose my major. Second, due to their experience, career ...
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Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...sion, people have different ideas about the question of whether students are more influenced by their t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, second, so, therefore, while, as to, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2022.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01736972705 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7784073787 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521091811414 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.3524046977 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.8888888889 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9259259259 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.74074074074 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276596766279 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0898505635209 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0858393177803 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211889933429 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0891376358218 0.0645574589148 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.24 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 4.0 10.002688172 40% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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