I certainly agree that successful people take risks and try new ways and situations. Someone can consciously weigh the pros and cons of each side. The explanations go as follows.
Firstly, it is more likely to be up to date with new modern technology. Nowadays, the world alters very quickly and humankind experiences a huge invention and advancement in several fields of science and engineering like transportation, communication, health caring, and artificial intelligence. Because of all these technical and theoretical improvements the ability of try new things is a necessary prerequisite to keep the pace with new progress and be successful. For instance, a youngster, who is computer engineer, needs to take the danger of losing money and works with marvelous and strange digital instruments such as smart phones and televisions.
Furthermore, finding a new innovative way or solution is another noticeable reason. These days, new technology not only assists human to be more comfortable but also brings us new problems and difficulties such as air pollution, traffic, or physical and psychological illness. Try a new risky thing is a key factor that can contribute workers and managers to extend their horizon and find a new solution to address those mentioned obstacles and issues. Based on a research study, which has been carried out in Department of Society of Utah University in 2016, more than 90% of inventions and discoveries including typing machine, airplane, and camera are proposed by persons who are interested to experience new things.
Admittedly, there are some justifications by one who argues that successful men do what they already know. Chiefly, it helps someone to save time. These days, all people and companies compete with each other to make more money. In this competition world, any time saving can help somebody to gain more profit and extreme interest rate. However, still I affirm that adults and children should try new things. Although this would be somehow time consuming, all the loss, for instance, will be compensated by offering a new product to the market.
Due to aforementioned ground, all folk should bear in mind that people cannot be prosperous unless they take risk and get new experience. Participation of learning and creativity are two prime and conspicuous supports.
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Essay evaluation report
with new modern technology.
with new and modern technologies.
with modern technologies.
flaws:
1. The second reason is still related to 'technology', same as the first reason.
These days, new technology not only assists human to be more comfortable...
2. In the third reason, 'successful men do what they already know. ', but the conclusion is: 'offering a new product to the market'
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 372 350
No. of Characters: 1902 1500
No. of Different Words: 237 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.392 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.113 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.936 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.579 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.773 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.316 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.279 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.516 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.034 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Please let me know what you
Please let me know what you mean by the follwoing sentence:
2. In the third reason, 'successful men do what they already know. ', but the conclusion is: 'offering a new product to the market'
The searon is that successful men do what they already know to save time to be successful. The conlcusion is "However, still I affirm that adults and children should try new things. Although this would be somehow time consuming, all the loss, for instance, will be compensated by offering a new product to the market. "
This time will be compensate by introduce a new product.
'will be compensated by
'will be compensated by offering a new product to the market.' come at the end suddenly. Need to put a little bit more content before , like: 'a furniture company/factory/provider... etc who is making products' to let people know better. If not, readers will be confused.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 24, Rule ID: NEW_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'innovative'.
Suggestion: innovative
...televisions. Furthermore, finding a new innovative way or solution is another noticeable r...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'still', 'for instance', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.258373205742 0.229887763892 112% => OK
Verbs: 0.148325358852 0.158761421928 93% => OK
Adjectives: 0.117224880383 0.0866891130778 135% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0406698564593 0.046263068375 88% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0191387559809 0.0685040099705 28% => Some pronouns wanted.
Prepositions: 0.0861244019139 0.118717715034 73% => OK
Participles: 0.0239234449761 0.0351676179071 68% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.04034397186 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0311004784689 0.0309702414327 100% => OK
Particles: 0.00239234449761 0.00188951952338 127% => OK
Determiners: 0.0717703349282 0.0887237588012 81% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0191387559809 0.0209618222197 91% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0143540669856 0.0139019557991 103% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2335.0 2387.08602151 98% => OK
No of words: 372.0 408.028673835 91% => OK
Chars per words: 6.27688172043 5.86048508987 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48200974243 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.384408602151 0.338922669872 113% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.306451612903 0.251872472559 122% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.225806451613 0.174417080927 129% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.166666666667 0.112833075102 148% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04034397186 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.639784946237 0.524397521467 122% => OK
Word variations: 81.3639767179 59.2087087015 137% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6684587814 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.5789473684 20.5533526081 95% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.5305671625 48.84282405 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.894736842 120.699889404 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5789473684 20.5533526081 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.578947368421 0.644075263715 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 50.2241086587 45.7405998639 110% => OK
Elegance: 1.77011494253 1.45489161554 122% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336373869401 0.300154397459 112% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0598826209043 0.103427244359 58% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.049375465239 0.0752933317313 66% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.493360712216 0.497263757937 99% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.145367955898 0.151897553556 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120934365057 0.114077575197 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582215338199 0.0781384742642 75% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.320617950575 0.336927656856 95% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0737713193992 0.067059652881 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21515195392 0.210909579961 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0291524842178 0.0618886996521 47% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8870967742 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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