TPO-20 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Everyone is seeking for success in his life. When it comes to the ways to get success, there are two ways, one of them is trying new things and taking risks, and the other is doing what you already now, which based on “The knowledge from books is basis on which the other knowledge rests” for this reasons people don’t like to try new things and think that the knowledge they already know is enough to get success in their life. The issue whether trying new things and taking risks is better than doing what we already know or not arouses much controversy among people from different ages, and different perspectives. Some contend think that people should do what they already know to avoid mistakes and get their success within a short period of time. However, in my opinion, I completely agree that they should take risks and try new things to learn a lot of experiences and skills in their lives and learning new things help them to be active.

To begin with, trying new things help them to learn lot of new experiences and skills in their life. Learning from experience makes us acquire a lot of valuable life lessons in our lives such as how to be self- confident, and responsible, even if books can benefit us in similar ways by giving us a lot of information and theoretical skills. However, not all of that we have to learn. There are so many times we fail to do something due to the absence of authentic knowledge, which can be gained from our practical experiences. Trying new things helps us to learn more and more even if we make mistakes, making mistakes helps us to understand what we do not know, and helps us to improve. Each experience has a lot of pros and cones; therefore we have to try new things even we do not like it, each new experience helps us to become mature. It reminds me with the most German Philosopher Wolf Gang Goethe’s saying that “ to make all wise truly thoughts ours, we have to think them thousands of to time until they take firm root in our personal experience” reflecting us that the importance of trying new practical experience.

In addition, learning new experience and skills, it helps people more active and energetic. Making the people what they know does not need any effort, the are long used to do it every day, which leads them to feel boring and not interesting in what they do, while the people who try new things, they try to do their best to get success, they think in depth, searching everywhere to gain knowledge about this new thing that helps them to be more all rounded. The knowledge which gets by a lot of efforts you can not forget forever. Being energetic and active is to learn something new, a good strategy that they can apply in their routine life which helps them to change their lifestyle. For example, I remember when I moved to united state back in 2006, I had opportunity to work as pharmacist technician, I already a pharmacist in my country, I had basic foundation about this fields, but it was new experience for me to compound medication, while I compound any medication, sometimes I faced a lot of issues, but by thinking, a lot of efforts such as reading lot of research about this topic, A good way helps me to improve and being active not stick when I face a new issue. There is proverb saying that success is only achieved by those who do not know that failure is inevitable, that reflecting us that we have to put the experience a stepping stone to our success.

As all things considered, while some people think that doing what you already know is conducive ways to success within a short period of time. I think that the advantages of trying new experiences are far outweighed than those who are doing the same things you already know it due to learning valuable life lessons and being active in our lives. Additionally, Due to fierce competition people have to try new things to be well informed.

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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'well', 'while', 'for example', 'i think', 'in addition', 'such as', 'in my opinion', 'to begin with']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.190293742018 0.229887763892 83% => OK
Verbs: 0.196679438059 0.158761421928 124% => OK
Adjectives: 0.088122605364 0.0866891130778 102% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0485312899106 0.046263068375 105% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0932311621967 0.0685040099705 136% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.106002554278 0.118717715034 89% => OK
Participles: 0.0485312899106 0.0351676179071 138% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.54273901418 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0510855683269 0.0309702414327 165% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0600255427842 0.0887237588012 68% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00766283524904 0.0209618222197 37% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0268199233716 0.0139019557991 193% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3934.0 2387.08602151 165% => OK
No of words: 704.0 408.028673835 173% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58806818182 5.86048508987 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.1510191538 4.48200974243 115% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.28125 0.338922669872 83% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.193181818182 0.251872472559 77% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.137784090909 0.174417080927 79% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0965909090909 0.112833075102 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54273901418 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.390625 0.524397521467 74% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 48.9403248817 59.2087087015 83% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6684587814 102% => OK
Sentence length: 33.5238095238 20.5533526081 163% => OK
Sentence length SD: 114.269899699 48.84282405 234% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 187.333333333 120.699889404 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.5238095238 20.5533526081 163% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.644075263715 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.54480286738 162% => OK
Readability: 52.841991342 45.7405998639 116% => OK
Elegance: 1.01886792453 1.45489161554 70% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341188291299 0.300154397459 114% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.168815256232 0.103427244359 163% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.104909204035 0.0752933317313 139% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.524966664378 0.497263757937 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.144323214947 0.151897553556 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146679366702 0.114077575197 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0753242788328 0.0781384742642 96% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.483372456829 0.336927656856 143% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0637638191595 0.067059652881 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26797749595 0.210909579961 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0401931362653 0.0618886996521 65% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8870967742 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 17.0 8.42114695341 202% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.75985663082 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Less content wanted. Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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trying new things help them
trying new things helps them

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No. of Words: 704 350 //it has some duplicated content.

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No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 704 350
No. of Characters: 3112 1500
No. of Different Words: 265 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.151 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.42 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.386 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 187 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 125 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.524 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 21.23 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.619 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.365 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.507 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.297 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5