Considering psychological studies, humans can be categorized with regard to their inherent features such as their gender and age. One of the main characteristics of any humankind is his willingness to risk. This feature plays a pivotal role in humans’ lives and determines their lifestyles. In other words, one can say that all of the humans’ actions are significantly influenced by his degree of willingness to risk.
The advocates of the idea that people have to take risks contend that taking risks will give people the chance to identify new opportunities, which may lead to their success. In fact, a person who tries new things may find himself more talented in the new field and may be more successful by working in this field. For example, a bank clerk who tries to learn how to write poems by attending different classes and studying various materials may become a very good poet in the future; otherwise, he remains the simple bank clerk for his whole life.
In addition, the supporter of the idea of taking risks claim that taking risks can be one way leads to the success, especially financial success. In fact, they state that huge swift successes are solely attainable by taking risks. In this regard, they refer to the people who have reached a lot of money in a short time by investing in high-risk projects in which only risk-seeking people would invest.
On the other hand, although the opponents of the idea of taking risks accept several cases of success attained by taking risks, at the same time they assert that the cases of failure are more than those of success in the real world. Indeed, they attribute the success in risky works to chance and always ask a question that why do people participate in risky actions, completely based on the chance, while they do not know the consequences? From their point of view, the probability of success can range from zero to a hundred percent.
To sum up, I am of the same opinion as the advocates of risky actions since, in my view, it is more advantageous than doing the same thing over and over.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 330, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...tyles. In other words, one can say that all of the humans' actions are significantly ...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... are solely attainable by taking risks. In this regard, they refer to the people w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, while, for example, in addition, in fact, such as, in my view, in other words, to sum up, with regard to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1726.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7811634349 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65408079047 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537396121884 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.2411023699 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.285714286 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7857142857 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0714285714 5.45110844103 185% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240316726111 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0754668899363 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543687647671 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123200344444 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0591632478766 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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