TPO-20 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by Aydin007 on Fri, 09/30/2016 - 08:28

Adventure is one of the fundamental instinct which god has blessed it for the human. Adventure encourage humans to do strange work during their life. Most of the scientists believe that human adventure emotion has the remarkable influence on the human success. These people try to experience everything in an unnatural way. Some people would like to experience new condition and try to do new things and does not attention about the dangerous of that. on the other side, There are some people would not like to take a risk in their life and would prefer to keep the life in a natural case. Although most of the people believe that successful people doing what they know how to do well, however, I strongly disagree with the following statement, successful person does not fear from hazardous situations. In the following essay, I would like to express my opinion with regard to the following topic. I have lots of good reasons for this, but the most important of them as follows:

The first and foremost, successful people do not concentrate on common work, as well as they would not like to repeat regular activity in their real life. They would prefer to take the risk rather than to repeat the routine works. Most of the time, famous and successful people is thrown away by the natural people's community. Following people have hot enthusiastic to achieve their goals. They believe that mistake is the part of the life ,thus they do not fear to make a mistake in their works. As regards, they take risks and repeat it plenty of time to get the efficient result from that way.

In the second place, successful people do not fear to do risky works, Actually, they do not fear from failure and they have enough self-confidence to reach their ultimate goals. Most of the researchers, adventures, scientists and big theorists who have known as successful person has this feature on them. For instance, Thomas Edison who is known as inventor of the electricity is a good sample of successful person. Thomas Edison makes a lot of hazardous works during his experiment. Edison tries to introduce a hidden energy to the world. Thomas does not inform about the dangerous of electricity energy, however, he keeps on their exploration to reach their final goals.

Be summing up, success is the high pleasure which each human would like to approach it. But honestly, most of the people do not have enough capacity to be a successful person in their real-life. This is not related their lack of cleverness or physical ability. This is just related to the each person viewpoint about the natural events. Maybe adventure distinct the successful people from the common one. They are different, not just would like to be that, Actually their opinions is made them different from other people.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 304, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an unnatural way" with adverb for "unnatural"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ese people try to experience everything in an unnatural way. Some people would like to experience n...
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Line 1, column 453, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: On
... attention about the dangerous of that. on the other side, There are some people w...
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Line 3, column 440, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...eve that mistake is the part of the life ,thus they do not fear to make a mistake ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'but', 'first', 'honestly', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'thus', 'well', 'as regards', 'for instance', 'as well as', 'with regard to', 'in the second place']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.208728652751 0.229887763892 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.166982922201 0.158761421928 105% => OK
Adjectives: 0.11385199241 0.0866891130778 131% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0512333965844 0.046263068375 111% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0607210626186 0.0685040099705 89% => OK
Prepositions: 0.108159392789 0.118717715034 91% => OK
Participles: 0.0208728652751 0.0351676179071 59% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.54426852048 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0455407969639 0.0309702414327 147% => OK
Particles: 0.00189753320683 0.00188951952338 100% => OK
Determiners: 0.0967741935484 0.0887237588012 109% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0151802656546 0.0209618222197 72% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.011385199241 0.0139019557991 82% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2782.0 2387.08602151 117% => OK
No of words: 477.0 408.028673835 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.8322851153 5.86048508987 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.339622641509 0.338922669872 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.222222222222 0.251872472559 88% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.163522012579 0.174417080927 94% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.121593291405 0.112833075102 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54426852048 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.444444444444 0.524397521467 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 49.9272306433 59.2087087015 84% => OK
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6684587814 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.3461538462 20.5533526081 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.989758861 48.84282405 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.0 120.699889404 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3461538462 20.5533526081 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.615384615385 0.644075263715 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 40.5683760684 45.7405998639 89% => OK
Elegance: 1.21088435374 1.45489161554 83% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309644986445 0.300154397459 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.113213211449 0.103427244359 109% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0697846937473 0.0752933317313 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.462197548625 0.497263757937 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.108902006308 0.151897553556 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118161766212 0.114077575197 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775153280838 0.0781384742642 99% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.503138977345 0.336927656856 149% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.092367724921 0.067059652881 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227914372412 0.210909579961 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0691825805906 0.0618886996521 112% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8870967742 151% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 16.0 8.42114695341 190% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 23.0 13.6433691756 169% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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