There is no shortage of debate whether it is better to have strong relationships or study hard to succeed in a job. As far as I am concerned people should lever themselves with higher-ups in order to get their best in a job rather than kill large amounts of books. I cling to this outlook for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, having contacts is the best way to cut corners in getting good skills for a job because experienced people always can teach you or give clues about how to do your best in a work environment. To clarify my point, let me take myself as an example, when I get fired in my last job, I did not feel sad nor stressful, due to the fact that I had a bunch of friends surrounded me and willing to help me out, so I decided to ask Julio –a great friend of mine- to give me some pieces of advice on how to be a better worker, and to then introduce myself to some great businesses which may could hire me. As a result of my friend’s help, now I have a great job and my boss is really glad about how I work.
Secondly, It is common knowledge that a person, who has studied a lot, should have a great job. But, It is not in general because I know lots of men, who have studied for around seven years and do not have a great job as mine. It is because meeting people, who can influence you with their mindset, you can know how to be an accurate worker. For instance, my co-worker is a master with three PhDs, but he is not as good as me, he usually asks me work-related questions and help, because he has never experienced a real work atmosphere, so he is associating theory with the real applications. Accordingly, I think that although you study for a long time, you will need to have great friends in order to be a better worker.
To sum up, I strongly believe that people should focus more on getting contacts because those will help them to be better while doing in a job because they will teach important knowledge and make you change your mindset in the best way possible.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 117, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...hips or study hard to succeed in a job. As far as I am concerned people should lev...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, if, look, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, while, for instance, i think, in general, as a result, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1661.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.22646310433 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45503430577 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511450381679 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.4788110228 48.9658058833 181% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.416666667 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.75 20.6045352989 159% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.8333333333 5.45110844103 235% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162671832991 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0699505865353 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.02846543244 0.0737576698707 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10918141815 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0271066683606 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.38 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.1575268817 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.85 10.9000537634 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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