Successful career has been a burning global issue. Some adult people suggest that it is crucial for juveniles to improve the capability of relating well to people to gain the success in the future. Personally, I agree with this suggestion.
On one hand, what I put in my priority is blooming career. The fact is that knowing many surrounding people, young people are highly likely to be confident. This has a tendency to bring lots of satisfaction to them when being in the working time. As a result, their efficiency rate in job is bound to be upgraded remarkably. It is a great opportunity for them to acquire a colorful career. More importantly, owning the great prestige creates chances for students to extend their relationship. It follows that they are supposed to meet a lot of successful people in many areas. These have a tendency to help new workers overcome the trouble that they encounter in job. Thus, there is likelihood that their career progresses successively. For this reason, their career is likely to be surrounded by the wonderful things. Beyond any doubt, creating a stable relationship encourages youth to gain the triumph in future career.
On the other hand, it is claimed that making oneself known to many people wastes extremely broad amount of time. Consequently, they are certain to get the job failure. However, it is just applicable to a minority. In fact, juveniles always schedule regular works appropriately. For this reason, time is highly likely to be used effectively. In addition, regarding other people creates chances for youth to self-assess. It is a marvelous condition for them to realize their weakness that they carry for a long time. Subsequently, they have a tendency to perfect themselves. Therefore, they are bound to become a smart person that many people admire. It is the essence of a fruitful career. By and large, the claim that spending time for good relationship causes the failure in job is unrealistic.
In summary, for all the mentioned above, subsidizing time for other people is a wise idea. It is strongly advised that adults should take my writing into the great consideration to guideline an appropriate policy on successful career.
- TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task 80
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statements?Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- TPO 39 - Independent taskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- TPO 39 - Independent taskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 66
- TPO-25 - Integrated Writing Task 61
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, regarding, so, therefore, thus, well, in addition, in fact, in summary, as a result, by and large, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 13.8261648746 7% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1842.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03278688525 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.896195484 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527322404372 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.1574184566 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 68.2222222222 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.5555555556 20.6045352989 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14814814815 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16219617699 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0424896070208 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0373808306535 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115954181398 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0335702081901 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.3 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.