Nowadays, because the pace of society is getting faster and faster, some contends that work quickly and risk making mistakes is much more important and more efficient. However, in my opinion, I completely disagree, the people should work carefully to avoid mistakes which cost the companies a lot of money, and to make the right decision.
A careful working means that people pay more attention to their job's details, such as accountants' attentions on those numbers especial on the points of decimal, programmers' attentions on the usage of RAM, or investors' attentions on subtle economic changes. With careful attitude, a programmer could design a well-running project with fewer bugs in it; with careful attitude, an accountant could do a precise account without any error in it; with careful attitude, an investor could do a successful investment. Jobs Steve, a careful and wisdom person, is a good example. He made lots of investments, such as I Pod, I Pad, I Phone etc. All of those earn numbers of money and make he get what he want such as the fame, the wealth, and the success. While, before he made a decision to invest lots in those projects, he did lots of researches in the customers' preference; he investigated the market requirement; he also studied economic development. Then he finally got a careful and detailed blueprint of Apple's development, leading his eventual success. Just take an assumption that Jobs made a quick decision without any researches about the market and the customers' requirement; or made a risk investment on other things without investigation about economic development in America. He might not be able to acquire the development trend of the electronic equipment; as a consequence, he could not make a right decision on investment. Maybe he will develop electronic dictionary or other electronic equipment. Then he would not get so much profit from that equipment, and people would not have the I-Phone, I-Pad, and I-Pod to use today. In this sense, careful working is very meaningful to people.
A sophisticated thought means that people will think twice before they make a decision. As the Confucius says, "Look before you leap.” think over before you make a decision is so important that will lead you to success or to failure. For instance, once my mother made a quick decision to buy a cyclopedia at an amazingly high price when she heard that a bookstore was selling a kind of limited edition cyclopedia. This book had been described as the one and the only one which contains most detailed information about china ancient document. At last, she found it was sold abundantly in another bookshop at a low price. How harmful it is to make the decision quickly without a sophisticated consideration. There is an assumption that if my mother takes more time to go around to do an investigation or to think over about the whole thing, she would find the book store's advertisement is exaggerated, and she would not be cheated. In this sense, a sophisticated plan is more important than a quick and risk decision.
Admittedly, on the other hand, some people think that the speed is a key aspect in many projects and there is an old saying that “time is money”. Therefore, in terms of this factor, complete tasks with high speed is likely to be a shortcut for the time, money saving and helps them to keep up with fast-pace of the societies.
In the nutshell, a correct and sophisticated decision is more important than a quick response for either people's career development or their life since they can be able to think carefully to take the right decision and to avoid mistakes.
- TPO-48 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. 70
- Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past 60
- why people are living longer now 76
- TPO INTEGRATED 49 65
- TPO INTEGRATD 48 63
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
No. of Words: 615 350 //put less content for examples.
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 25 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 615 350
No. of Characters: 2930 1500
No. of Different Words: 280 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.98 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.764 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.748 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 195 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 160 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 109 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 70 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.323 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.458 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.283 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.476 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.166 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ney, and to make the right decision. A careful working means that people pay ...
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Line 3, column 684, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gets'.
Suggestion: gets
...those earn numbers of money and make he get what he want such as the fame, the weal...
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Line 3, column 696, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...umbers of money and make he get what he want such as the fame, the wealth, and the s...
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Line 3, column 848, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'customers'' or 'customer's'?
Suggestion: customers'; customer's
...jects, he did lots of researches in the customers preference; he investigated the market ...
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Line 3, column 1158, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'customers'' or 'customer's'?
Suggestion: customers'; customer's
...any researches about the market and the customers requirement; or made a risk investment ...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...king is very meaningful to people. A sophisticated thought means that peopl...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tant than a quick and risk decision. Admittedly, on the other hand, some peop...
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Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...up with fast-pace of the societies. In the nutshell, a correct and sophistic...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'finally', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'well', 'while', 'for instance', 'kind of', 'such as', 'in my opinion', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.232424677188 0.229887763892 101% => OK
Verbs: 0.131994261119 0.158761421928 83% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0961262553802 0.0866891130778 111% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0502152080344 0.046263068375 109% => OK
Pronouns: 0.051649928264 0.0685040099705 75% => OK
Prepositions: 0.113342898135 0.118717715034 95% => OK
Participles: 0.012912482066 0.0351676179071 37% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.8977370764 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0272596843615 0.0309702414327 88% => OK
Particles: 0.00143472022956 0.00188951952338 76% => OK
Determiners: 0.113342898135 0.0887237588012 128% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0200860832138 0.0209618222197 96% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00860832137733 0.0139019557991 62% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3659.0 2387.08602151 153% => OK
No of words: 615.0 408.028673835 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.94959349593 5.86048508987 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.97987886753 4.48200974243 111% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.338211382114 0.338922669872 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.271544715447 0.251872472559 108% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.20162601626 0.174417080927 116% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.141463414634 0.112833075102 125% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8977370764 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 212.727598566 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468292682927 0.524397521467 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 57.5062914873 59.2087087015 97% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6684587814 121% => OK
Sentence length: 24.6 20.5533526081 120% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.4013589596 48.84282405 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.36 120.699889404 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6 20.5533526081 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.64 0.644075263715 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.54480286738 144% => OK
Readability: 51.7544715447 45.7405998639 113% => OK
Elegance: 1.53374233129 1.45489161554 105% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.388058168485 0.300154397459 129% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.105827280288 0.103427244359 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0761634037906 0.0752933317313 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.451184354092 0.497263757937 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.19695759608 0.151897553556 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129719817019 0.114077575197 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.08573241566 0.0781384742642 110% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.289883637222 0.336927656856 86% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0318641288236 0.067059652881 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.278681106011 0.210909579961 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0581138679863 0.0618886996521 94% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8870967742 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 8.42114695341 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 13.6433691756 154% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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